{"id":91,"date":"2022-04-04T15:50:55","date_gmt":"2022-04-04T15:50:55","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/esc-businesscomskills\/chapter\/putting-it-together-writing-in-business\/"},"modified":"2022-04-19T15:34:31","modified_gmt":"2022-04-19T15:34:31","slug":"putting-it-together-writing-in-business","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/esc-businesscomskills\/chapter\/putting-it-together-writing-in-business\/","title":{"raw":"Putting It Together: Writing in Business","rendered":"Putting It Together: Writing in Business"},"content":{"raw":"Let's look back at Dennis's email from the beginning on this module. How could things have gone better for Dennis and for Diversity Day if he had actively followed the writing process steps we just learned?\r\n

Plan<\/h2>\r\nDennis should have prepared for this direct message to confirm the speaker and get the title for the talk. Rennata, the receiver, will either be pleased or neutral about the details for her talk and the request for the title of the talk. If Dennis could do it over, here is the outline he might create:\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n\r\n
Components<\/th>\r\nNotes<\/th>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<\/thead>\r\n
News<\/td>\r\nNeed talk title and confirm diversity day arrangements. Thanks.<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n
Reasons<\/td>\r\nApril 23 the day. Be here at 8:30. Done by 3:30. Need title of your talk for brochure publ on April 16.<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n
Goodwill and Action<\/td>\r\nBenefit she\u2019ll bring to event. Date to confirm April 15.<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<\/tbody>\r\n<\/table>\r\n

Write<\/h2>\r\nDennis's preparation would help him see that his original message included too much irrelevant detail that hid his full message. He should focus on accomplishing the task he was asked to do and not put in all that other information.\r\n

Revise<\/h2>\r\nAfter he wrote it, then he would revise the message with attention to the layout, white space, you-view, and proofreading to say the least. Here is what he could have produced, if only he had taken just a little more time to focus on his message.\r\n
\r\n\r\nDate: April 1, 2018\r\n
\r\n\r\nTo: Rennata Johnson, CEO of Diversity NOW <rjohnson@diversitynow.com>\r\n\r\nFrom:\u00a0Dennis Hoffman <shoffman@qcom.com>\r\n\r\nRe: Diversity Day\r\n\r\nThe details you requested for your much anticipated April 23 talk follow. To promote your talk, could you please provide the title?\r\n\r\nYour expertise in corporate diversity training makes this a great day. Here is your schedule for the day:\r\n