{"id":1856,"date":"2016-10-06T21:16:27","date_gmt":"2016-10-06T21:16:27","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/engcomp1-wmopen\/?post_type=chapter&p=1856"},"modified":"2016-10-06T21:16:27","modified_gmt":"2016-10-06T21:16:27","slug":"try-it-voice","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-corningcc-engcomp1wmopen-1\/chapter\/try-it-voice\/","title":{"raw":"Try It: Voice","rendered":"Try It: Voice"},"content":{"raw":"Read this introduction to an academic study written by an undergraduate linguistics student. As you read, note\u00a0the use of the active and passive voices. Are they used effectively? What revisions would you suggest? The sentences have been numbered to aid you in your comments.\r\n

(1)\u00a0In this modern age, technology is becoming ever more prevalent, appearing in every facet of our lives. (2)\u00a0A\u00a0lot of discussion about whether technology is hurting or helping our ability to communicate has been inspired by this increase in technology. (3)\u00a0The\u00a0debate about\u00a0the effectiveness of uni- and multi-modality in media is one of the most interesting research topics in this area. (4)\u00a0Uni-modality is the\u00a0use of one medium (e.g., only text or only audio), and multi-modality is the use of\u00a0multiple mediums (e.g., text and images or audio\u00a0and a video). (5)\u00a0It is argued that mutli-modality\u00a0enhances a work's intended message, but others think that mutli-modality detracts from the experience.<\/p>\r\n

\"Bareilles(6)\u00a0The effectiveness of the multi-modailty of\u00a0the music video of the song Brave<\/em> by Sara Bareilles will be examined in this paper (its two modalities\u00a0are audio\u00a0and video). (7)\u00a0In the lyrics, listeners are encouraged to cast aside their fear and be themselves. (8)\u00a0The video features Sara Bareilles and six other individuals dancing by themselves (all in separate locations) in public. (9)\u00a0While Sara is\u00a0featured\u00a0in locations without any other people, the other dancers are surrounded by people who don\u2019t know why they are dancing. (10)\u00a0This paper will analyze the lyrics of this song to find their intended effect, and then analyze the video to see if it enhances or detracts from this intention.<\/p>\r\n[practice-area rows=\"4\"][\/practice-area]\r\n[reveal-answer q=\"270753\"]Show Answer[\/reveal-answer]\r\n[hidden-answer a=\"270753\"]Sentences 1, 3, 4, 8, and 10 are effective active sentences.\r\n\r\nSentence 2 is in the passive voice; using the active voice would make this sentence much easier to understand: \"This increase of technology has inspired a<\/strong>\u00a0lot of discussion about whether technology is hurting or helping our ability to communicate.\"\r\n\r\nOne half of sentence 5 is in the passive voice, and the other is in the active voice. Not only does this combination make the sentence confusing to read, it also strips the sentence of parallelism. A better sentence would be something like this:\u00a0\"Some argue<\/strong> that mutli-modality\u00a0enhances a work's\u00a0intended message, but others think that mutli-modality detracts from the experience.\"\r\n\r\nSentence 6\u00a0is in the passive voice; using the active voice would make this sentence much easier to understand: \"This paper will examine<\/strong> the effectiveness of the multi-modailty of\u00a0the music video of the song Brave<\/em> by Sara Bareilles (its two modalities\u00a0are audio\u00a0and video).\"\r\n\r\nSentence 7 is passive. Its technically fine, but it might be better to say \"The lyrics encourage listeners<\/strong> to cast aside their fear and be themselves.\"\r\n\r\nSentence 9 an effective\u00a0passive sentence: we the focus of the sentence to be\u00a0on Sara and the dancers, not on the video and the surrounding people.\r\n\r\n[\/hidden-answer]","rendered":"

Read this introduction to an academic study written by an undergraduate linguistics student. As you read, note\u00a0the use of the active and passive voices. Are they used effectively? What revisions would you suggest? The sentences have been numbered to aid you in your comments.<\/p>\n

(1)\u00a0In this modern age, technology is becoming ever more prevalent, appearing in every facet of our lives. (2)\u00a0A\u00a0lot of discussion about whether technology is hurting or helping our ability to communicate has been inspired by this increase in technology. (3)\u00a0The\u00a0debate about\u00a0the effectiveness of uni- and multi-modality in media is one of the most interesting research topics in this area. (4)\u00a0Uni-modality is the\u00a0use of one medium (e.g., only text or only audio), and multi-modality is the use of\u00a0multiple mediums (e.g., text and images or audio\u00a0and a video). (5)\u00a0It is argued that mutli-modality\u00a0enhances a work’s intended message, but others think that mutli-modality detracts from the experience.<\/p>\n

\"Bareilles(6)\u00a0The effectiveness of the multi-modailty of\u00a0the music video of the song Brave<\/em> by Sara Bareilles will be examined in this paper (its two modalities\u00a0are audio\u00a0and video). (7)\u00a0In the lyrics, listeners are encouraged to cast aside their fear and be themselves. (8)\u00a0The video features Sara Bareilles and six other individuals dancing by themselves (all in separate locations) in public. (9)\u00a0While Sara is\u00a0featured\u00a0in locations without any other people, the other dancers are surrounded by people who don\u2019t know why they are dancing. (10)\u00a0This paper will analyze the lyrics of this song to find their intended effect, and then analyze the video to see if it enhances or detracts from this intention.<\/p>\n