Yersinia pestis<\/em> (the cause of the bubonic plague)[\/caption]\r\n(1) The type-six-secretion-system (T6SS) has been identified as a mechanism by which Vibrio cholera<\/em> can resist predation by larger predators, such as protozoa, and by which it can alter the environment around it by killing other bacteriums. (2) Other bacteriums also contain the T6SS, but them\u00a0have not been well studied. (3) In some bacteriums, the T6SS appears to play an active role in host virulence as they\u00a0assist the bacteriums in altering the host environment. (4) The bacterium Yersinia pestis <\/em>has genes which encode for several T6SSs, but they have not been well studied in virulence against different types of\u00a0bacteriums. (5) In this study, we hypothesize that the T6SSs in Y.\u00a0pestis<\/em> kill a variety of bacteriums. (6) Identifying the function of these genes in Y. pestis<\/em> could assist in understanding the mechanism by which the bacteriums infect the host and cause disease. (7)\u00a0It\u00a0could also give a novel target for future antibiotics.<\/p>\r\n[practice-area rows=\"4\"][\/practice-area]\r\n[reveal-answer q=\"674310\"]Show Answer[\/reveal-answer]\r\n[hidden-answer a=\"674310\"]Throughout the passage,\u00a0bacterium<\/em>\u00a0has been incorrectly pluralized as bacteriums<\/em>. The correct plural of\u00a0bacterium<\/em> is bacteria<\/em>. You may be more familiar with the word\u00a0bacteria<\/em> than the word\u00a0bacterium<\/em>\u00a0because the organisms are so small that they are usually talked about in large groups.\r\n\r\nThe subject of sentence 1 is \"The type-six-secretion-system.\" While this is a compound noun, it should be an open compound with no hyphens: \"The type six secretion system.\"\u00a0Later in sentence 1, the object pronoun it<\/em> is misused;\u00a0we should\u00a0use the reflexive pronoun\u00a0itself<\/em> instead since it<\/em> is both the subject and the object of the clause: \". . . it can alter the environment around itself<\/strong> by killing other bacteria.\"\r\n\r\nIn sentence 2, we need to use the subject-case\u00a0they<\/em> not the object-case\u00a0them<\/em>: \" Other bacteria\u00a0also contain the T6SS, but they<\/strong> have not been well studied.\"\r\n\r\nIn sentence 3, the plural\u00a0they<\/em> should be the singular\u00a0it <\/em>because\u00a0T6SS<\/em> is a singular noun. When you change the pronoun, make sure you use the correct verb as well. Additionally, the sentence might be more clear if altering the host environment<\/em> is revised\u00a0to use the possessive pronoun\u00a0their<\/em> instead of\u00a0the<\/em>:\u00a0\" In some bacteria, the T6SS appears to play an active role in host virulence as it\u00a0assists<\/strong> the bacteria in altering their<\/strong> host environment.\"\r\n\r\nIn sentence 4, is the relative pronoun\u00a0which<\/em>\u00a0used correctly? While a lot of people will say that which<\/em> should not be used when you don't have commas (and that\u00a0that<\/em> should be used instead),\u00a0it is technically fine and okay to use here.\r\n\r\nIn sentence 5, there is no explicit antecedent for\u00a0we<\/em>;\u00a0however,\u00a0we don't necessarily need one since\u00a0we<\/em> is\u00a0a first-person pronoun. We\u00a0can assume the antecedent is the writers of the paper.\r\n\r\nSentence 7 begins with the pronoun\u00a0it<\/em>. The antecedent for this pronoun is \"Identifying the function of these genes in Y. pestis.<\/em>\" While\u00a0it<\/em> can have complex antecedents, it might be better in this case to use the pronoun\u00a0this<\/em>\u00a0(perhaps with the addition of another word as well):\r\n\r\n \t- This<\/em> could also give a novel target for future antibiotics.<\/li>\r\n \t
- Accomplishing this<\/em> could also give a novel target for future antibiotics.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n[\/hidden-answer]","rendered":"
Read the following introduction\u00a0to a research\u00a0paper written by an undergraduate microbiology\u00a0student. As you read, critique the use of nouns and\u00a0pronoun case,\u00a0clarity, and\u00a0agreement.\u00a0The sentences have been numbered to aid you in your comments.<\/p>\n
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Yersinia pestis<\/em> (the cause of the bubonic plague)<\/p>\n<\/div>\n(1) The type-six-secretion-system (T6SS) has been identified as a mechanism by which Vibrio cholera<\/em> can resist predation by larger predators, such as protozoa, and by which it can alter the environment around it by killing other bacteriums. (2) Other bacteriums also contain the T6SS, but them\u00a0have not been well studied. (3) In some bacteriums, the T6SS appears to play an active role in host virulence as they\u00a0assist the bacteriums in altering the host environment. (4) The bacterium Yersinia pestis <\/em>has genes which encode for several T6SSs, but they have not been well studied in virulence against different types of\u00a0bacteriums. (5) In this study, we hypothesize that the T6SSs in Y.\u00a0pestis<\/em> kill a variety of bacteriums. (6) Identifying the function of these genes in Y. pestis<\/em> could assist in understanding the mechanism by which the bacteriums infect the host and cause disease. (7)\u00a0It\u00a0could also give a novel target for future antibiotics.<\/p>\n