{"id":204,"date":"2016-06-10T18:46:01","date_gmt":"2016-06-10T18:46:01","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level3-english\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=204"},"modified":"2020-11-19T19:18:47","modified_gmt":"2020-11-19T19:18:47","slug":"text-the-organizational-statement","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-esc-englishcomposition1-2\/chapter\/text-the-organizational-statement\/","title":{"raw":"Organizational Statements in Thesis Sentences","rendered":"Organizational Statements in Thesis Sentences"},"content":{"raw":"<img class=\"alignleft wp-image-2626 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2016\/06\/31184307\/CW-OER-gps-300x225.jpg\" alt=\"decorative image\" width=\"300\" height=\"225\" \/>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sometimes, an organizational statement will be used in conjunction with a\u00a0thesis. \u00a0An organizational statement is a map that tells readers what they\u00a0should expect to read in an\u00a0essay. \u00a0It introduces the two or three main pieces of evidence that the author\u00a0will use to support the essay's\u00a0position. While not required in a thesis, organizational statements can make for stronger thesis statements.<\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">An organizational statement\u00a0can take the form of a separate sentence or can be attached to a\u00a0thesis in a single sentence, as seen in the examples below. The organizational elements appear in bold text:\u00a0<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Movies produced in the mid-1950s used obsessive behavior to depict teenage romance as something dangerous that should be avoided. \u00a0Obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and harmful<\/strong>, both to the teenagers and to the people who loved them.<\/span><\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\">Since obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and dangerous<\/strong>, movies produced in the mid-1950s used it to depict teenage romance as something that should be avoided for the sake of young adults and the people who loved them.<\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Notice how the 2nd version above strengthens the original thesis, by appearing as part of the same sentence. \u00a0<\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evidence in the body of an essay should be presented in the same order that it appears in an organizational statement. In the\u00a0example above, it means the\u00a0essay would have to discuss rebelliousness, an uncontrollable nature, and danger (as they relate to obsessive teenage romance in film) <i>in that order<\/i>.<\/span><\/p>\r\nIn the following video, the second step focuses on \"roadmap,\" which refers to the organizational statement in a thesis sentence. The video also offers a chance for you to practice creating a thesis with an organizational statement.\r\n\r\nhttps:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=KmTWSNKpsDU","rendered":"<p><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignleft wp-image-2626 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2016\/06\/31184307\/CW-OER-gps-300x225.jpg\" alt=\"decorative image\" width=\"300\" height=\"225\" \/><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sometimes, an organizational statement will be used in conjunction with a\u00a0thesis. \u00a0An organizational statement is a map that tells readers what they\u00a0should expect to read in an\u00a0essay. \u00a0It introduces the two or three main pieces of evidence that the author\u00a0will use to support the essay&#8217;s\u00a0position. While not required in a thesis, organizational statements can make for stronger thesis statements.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">An organizational statement\u00a0can take the form of a separate sentence or can be attached to a\u00a0thesis in a single sentence, as seen in the examples below. The organizational elements appear in bold text:\u00a0<\/span><\/p>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Movies produced in the mid-1950s used obsessive behavior to depict teenage romance as something dangerous that should be avoided. \u00a0Obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and harmful<\/strong>, both to the teenagers and to the people who loved them.<\/span><\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\">Since obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and dangerous<\/strong>, movies produced in the mid-1950s used it to depict teenage romance as something that should be avoided for the sake of young adults and the people who loved them.<\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Notice how the 2nd version above strengthens the original thesis, by appearing as part of the same sentence. \u00a0<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evidence in the body of an essay should be presented in the same order that it appears in an organizational statement. In the\u00a0example above, it means the\u00a0essay would have to discuss rebelliousness, an uncontrollable nature, and danger (as they relate to obsessive teenage romance in film) <i>in that order<\/i>.<\/span><\/p>\n<p>In the following video, the second step focuses on &#8220;roadmap,&#8221; which refers to the organizational statement in a thesis sentence. The video also offers a chance for you to practice creating a thesis with an organizational statement.<\/p>\n<p><iframe loading=\"lazy\" id=\"oembed-1\" title=\"Practice: Thesis Statement\" width=\"500\" height=\"281\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/KmTWSNKpsDU?feature=oembed&#38;rel=0\" frameborder=\"0\" allowfullscreen=\"allowfullscreen\"><\/iframe><\/p>\n\n\t\t\t <section class=\"citations-section\" role=\"contentinfo\">\n\t\t\t <h3>Candela Citations<\/h3>\n\t\t\t\t\t <div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <div id=\"citation-list-204\">\n\t\t\t\t\t\t\t <div class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Original<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>The Organizational Statement. Revision and adaptation of the page What are thesis and organizational statements? at https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Lumen Learning. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-engcomp1-wmopen\/chapter\/text-the-organizational-statement\/\">https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-engcomp1-wmopen\/chapter\/text-the-organizational-statement\/<\/a>. <strong>Project<\/strong>: English Composition I. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC-SA: Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>What are thesis and organizational statements?. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Angela Francis. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: CUNY Academic Commons. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/\">https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC-SA: Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>image of navigation device on car dashboard. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Dariusz Sankowski. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Pixabay. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/pixabay.com\/en\/navigation-car-drive-road-gps-1048294\/\">https:\/\/pixabay.com\/en\/navigation-car-drive-road-gps-1048294\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/about\/cc0\">CC0: No Rights Reserved<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>video Practice: Thesis Statement. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Mastering the Fundamentals of College Reading and Writing, Wake Technical Community College. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=KmTWSNKpsDU\">https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=KmTWSNKpsDU<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em>Other<\/em>. <strong>License Terms<\/strong>: YouTube video<\/li><\/ul><\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t <\/section>","protected":false},"author":19,"menu_order":5,"template":"","meta":{"_candela_citation":"[{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"What are thesis and organizational statements?\",\"author\":\"Angela Francis\",\"organization\":\"CUNY Academic Commons\",\"url\":\"https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-nc-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"original\",\"description\":\"The Organizational Statement. 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