{"id":2372,"date":"2018-06-07T20:31:33","date_gmt":"2018-06-07T20:31:33","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-esc-wm-englishcomposition1\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=2372"},"modified":"2018-09-07T14:51:19","modified_gmt":"2018-09-07T14:51:19","slug":"revision-stage-1-idea-structure-purpose-audience","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-esc-englishcomposition1-2\/chapter\/revision-stage-1-idea-structure-purpose-audience\/","title":{"raw":"Revision Stage 1: Idea Structure, Purpose, Audience","rendered":"Revision Stage 1: Idea Structure, Purpose, Audience"},"content":{"raw":"Set your draft aside for a while (at least a day) so you can approach revision processes with a fresh mind. First, re-read your draft and consider the draft in the context of your purpose and audience. If the draft doesn't \"fit\" your writing purpose or audience, you will need to do some major re-thinking and revision.\r\n\r\nThen, still on the level of big ideas, consider your thesis and topic sentences to make sure they are thesis and topic sentences, and that they relate to one another. Ask and answer the following questions:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>As a reader, can I clearly identify a thesis and topic sentences?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Do I actually have a thesis with a topic and an angle\/argument\/assertion about that topic?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Do all of my topic sentences and their units of support also have topics and angles, and do my topic sentences relate<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<img class=\"alignright wp-image-2868 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/16110149\/CW-OER-idea-300x182.jpg\" alt=\"light bulb with idea bubbles radiating from the center\" width=\"300\" height=\"182\" \/>\r\n\r\nOne method that may help you answer these questions is to annotate your draft and do a reverse outline. Annotation involves noting the main ideas in each section of the essay. Number your paragraphs in the essay. Then make a numbered list and write the main idea of each paragraph, in the order in which the ideas actually occur in your draft, and analyze your list.\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Are the ideas organized into categories or groups that make sense?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Is the order of ideas (topic sentences and units of support) logical, given the thesis?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Are there paragraphs that should be shifted to other locations, because they really relate to different topic sentences and units of support?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Is there an overall introduction-body-conclusion structure?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Does the introduction appropriately introduce the topic of the essa, interest a reader, and offer the main idea?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Does the conclusion re-state the main idea?<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\nThe following video explains how to do a reverse outline:\r\n\r\n[embed]https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=XrtRkz15BFM[\/embed]\r\n\r\n<a href=\"https:\/\/explorationsofstyle.com\/2011\/02\/09\/reverse-outlines\/\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">Rachael Cayley\u2019s blog entry on Reverse Outlines<\/a>, mentioned at the end of the video, is a useful resource for\u00a0information on doing\u00a0\"big\" revisions.\r\n<p style=\"font-size: small\">(Note: If you find low-contrast text difficult to read, you may view a <a href=\"https:\/\/www.w3.org\/services\/html2txt?url=https%3A%2F%2Fexplorationsofstyle.com%2F2011%2F02%2F09%2Freverse-outlines%2F\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">text-only version of Rachael Cayley's blog entry<\/a>.)<\/p>","rendered":"<p>Set your draft aside for a while (at least a day) so you can approach revision processes with a fresh mind. First, re-read your draft and consider the draft in the context of your purpose and audience. If the draft doesn&#8217;t &#8220;fit&#8221; your writing purpose or audience, you will need to do some major re-thinking and revision.<\/p>\n<p>Then, still on the level of big ideas, consider your thesis and topic sentences to make sure they are thesis and topic sentences, and that they relate to one another. Ask and answer the following questions:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>As a reader, can I clearly identify a thesis and topic sentences?<\/li>\n<li>Do I actually have a thesis with a topic and an angle\/argument\/assertion about that topic?<\/li>\n<li>Do all of my topic sentences and their units of support also have topics and angles, and do my topic sentences relate<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignright wp-image-2868 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/16110149\/CW-OER-idea-300x182.jpg\" alt=\"light bulb with idea bubbles radiating from the center\" width=\"300\" height=\"182\" \/><\/p>\n<p>One method that may help you answer these questions is to annotate your draft and do a reverse outline. Annotation involves noting the main ideas in each section of the essay. Number your paragraphs in the essay. Then make a numbered list and write the main idea of each paragraph, in the order in which the ideas actually occur in your draft, and analyze your list.<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Are the ideas organized into categories or groups that make sense?<\/li>\n<li>Is the order of ideas (topic sentences and units of support) logical, given the thesis?<\/li>\n<li>Are there paragraphs that should be shifted to other locations, because they really relate to different topic sentences and units of support?<\/li>\n<li>Is there an overall introduction-body-conclusion structure?<\/li>\n<li>Does the introduction appropriately introduce the topic of the essa, interest a reader, and offer the main idea?<\/li>\n<li>Does the conclusion re-state the main idea?<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>The following video explains how to do a reverse outline:<\/p>\n<p><iframe loading=\"lazy\" id=\"oembed-1\" title=\"Editing: Reverse Outline\" width=\"500\" height=\"281\" 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class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Original<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Revision Stage 1: Idea Structure, Purpose, Audience. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Susan Oaks. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Empire State College, SUNY OER Services. <strong>Project<\/strong>: College Writing. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC: Attribution-NonCommercial<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>image of lightbulb with idea bubbles eminating from the bulb. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: TeroVesalainen. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Pixabay. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/pixabay.com\/en\/mindmap-brainstorm-idea-innovation-2123973\/\">https:\/\/pixabay.com\/en\/mindmap-brainstorm-idea-innovation-2123973\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/about\/cc0\">CC0: No Rights Reserved<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">All rights reserved content<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>video  Editing: Reverse Outline. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Academic Skills, The University of Melbourne. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=XrtRkz15BFM\">https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=XrtRkz15BFM<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em>Other<\/em>. <strong>License Terms<\/strong>: Standard YouTube License<\/li><\/ul><\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t 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