{"id":2773,"date":"2018-06-14T17:24:01","date_gmt":"2018-06-14T17:24:01","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-esc-wm-englishcomposition1\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=2773"},"modified":"2021-01-26T15:59:33","modified_gmt":"2021-01-26T15:59:33","slug":"sarahs-essay-in-process-2","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-esc-englishcomposition1-2\/chapter\/sarahs-essay-in-process-2\/","title":{"raw":"Sarah's Essay in Process","rendered":"Sarah&#8217;s Essay in Process"},"content":{"raw":"<img class=\"alignleft wp-image-2776 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/14175410\/CW-OER-public-speaking-300x212.jpg\" alt=\"decorative image\" width=\"300\" height=\"212\" \/>\r\n\r\nRead the following, which shows the process one student, Sarah,\u00a0went through, from prewriting to final draft. Sarah's comments on her process are also included.\u00a0 Sarah ended up writing an essay about public speaking online.\r\n\r\n<a href=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/28163706\/CW-Sarahs-Essay-in-Process-final-version.docx\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"attachment noopener wp-att-3306\">Download Sarah's Essay in Process<\/a>\r\n\r\n- or read below -\r\n<h1>Sarah\u2019s Essay in Process<strong>\u00a0<\/strong><\/h1>\r\n<h2>Freewriting<\/h2>\r\n<table>\r\n<tbody>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Don\u2019t know, don\u2019t know, don\u2019t know. I\u2019m afraid that I\u2019m doing this wrong.\u00a0 Fears.\u00a0 Falling and bumping my head.\u00a0 Traffic jams.\u00a0 Aggressive dogs that are not on leashes.\u00a0 Speaking to large groups.\u00a0 I\u2019m focusing on communications, and I think that I should do a public speaking course to develop my skill and overcome my fears, even though I may not want to.\u00a0 Courses.\u00a0 Courses that I need vs. courses that I want to take.\u00a0 Photography.\u00a0 Public history.\u00a0 Digital communications.\u00a0 I really like developing websites and updating my blog on cooking.\u00a0 I follow other blogs as well, travel, cooking, moms juggling work and family.\u00a0 My own blog on cooking has gotten a bit of attention recently and locally, because I focus on using local produce in different recipes, and have written about local farms and restaurants. Even asked to talk to some local groups in person, although I don\u2019t know about that. It\u2019s a real struggle sometimes.\u00a0 Writing, on the other hand, comes easily, at least in terms of blogging. Don\u2019t know\u2026\u00a0 maybe essay writing will be different, because of the length? Used to writing really short pieces for online. Photography is great to support those pieces. I took a photography intro course at the community college years ago when I started to take college courses.\u00a0 Really enjoyed it and want to take more. We\u2019ll see\u2026\u00a0 public speaking, though, is something that I\u2019m afraid of.\u00a0 But I do know that I need to study it, especially as a student of communications, because it\u2019s such an important method of communicating. And I am being asked to speak locally to some groups.\u00a0 Library lunchtime series, community college nutrition interest group for seniors, farm market program. Scares me, though.\u00a0 Talked to my husband about it. \u00a0Again, we\u2019ll see\u2026<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<\/tbody>\r\n<\/table>\r\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\r\n<em>After looking at this prewriting and a series of other prewritings, I saw that I was focusing on two topics, 1) my love of photography, and 2) my fear of public speaking.\u00a0 I decided to try to compare them, and started working with my prewritings in the following way.<\/em>\r\n\r\n<strong>\u00a0<\/strong><strong>Working with Prewriting <\/strong>\r\n<table>\r\n<tbody>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td><strong>Photography <\/strong><\/td>\r\n<td><strong>Public speaking<\/strong><\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Focuses totally on images \u2013 no words<\/td>\r\n<td>Use images, but focuses on words<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Important piece of communication<\/td>\r\n<td>Important piece of communication<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Can be done any time<\/td>\r\n<td>Needs to have an audience \u2013 but can it be done any time for an audience to access asynchronously?<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Like it because I am in control of the image<\/td>\r\n<td>Don\u2019t like it because I feel that I\u2019m not in control of the audience<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Calms me<\/td>\r\n<td>Makes me anxious<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<\/tbody>\r\n<\/table>\r\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\r\n<em>Because I came up with some comparisons, my initial impulse was to write an essay that compared photography and public speaking.\u00a0 The following is a very, very rough draft, trying to get my thoughts into more of an essay form.<\/em>\r\n<h2>Initial Draft<\/h2>\r\nNeed an introduction\u2026\r\n\r\nWorking thesis: Photography and public speaking are both similar and different.\r\n\r\nPhotography and public speaking are both important means of communication.\u00a0 Photos bring messages universally.\u00a0 Who hasn\u2019t seen and responded to images of important events, ads, and more?\u00a0 Public speaking is also an important means of communication seen in the many press conferences on television and the many local events that attract others.\u00a0 Audience members interested in a topic are willing to go and hear a speaker talk about gardening or the history of immigration in the area or whatever \u2013 and they usually learn from the public speaker, just as they learn from any images.\r\n\r\nPhotography can be done any time and when I do it, I feel calm and in control.\u00a0 I can control the image, and can re-take it (if possible).\u00a0 Use examples here of images I have taken.\u00a0 Also bring in some public response?\r\n\r\nPublic speaking may not be done any time, and when I do it, which is as infrequently as possible, I do not feel calm and in control.\u00a0 Bring in examples of the few times I was asked to speak.\u00a0 My blogging is a form of public speaking, but that\u2019s in writing and not in real time, so I am calmer and more in control.\r\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\r\n<em>I developed a working thesis, and then wrote this out relatively quickly.\u00a0 Then I got stuck.\u00a0 I knew I had a thesis, but what I wrote seemed kind of rambling to me, and kind of \u201cblah.\u201d\u00a0 I wasn\u2019t writing about anything really insightful, not that I had to \u2013 I certainly could write about anything I wanted to, and absolutely did not have to write about world-important events.\u00a0 In fact, we were told to avoid \u201cusual\u201d college essay topics like television\u2019s effect on children, alcohol\/drug use, etc.\u00a0 But I just felt stuck and unable to go farther.\u00a0 I kept going back to the three-part thesis idea, and thought that I really didn\u2019t have much insight here. I talked with my husband, and let him read my initial thoughts, to see if he could give me some ideas.\u00a0 He said something that sparked my thinking: \u201cYou don\u2019t really have to public speak in real time anymore.\u201d\u00a0 Hmmm\u2026 I mentioned to him that taking an online course, then, in public speaking, might be the route for me to conquer my fears, and his reaction was \u201cReally?\u00a0 Even though you don\u2019t have to speak in real time, don\u2019t you have to learn public speaking in real time, and actually give speeches to people who are right there?\u00a0 Otherwise, how will you know you can do it?\u201d\u00a0 This got me thinking.\u00a0 I now had more of a debatable topic and thought I could develop more of an assertion, and maybe even some insight for readers to keep thinking about.\u00a0 I developed my next draft.<\/em>\r\n<h2>Second Draft<\/h2>\r\nPublic speaking teaching has moved from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about just what public speaking is and if it\u2019s worth it to study it online.\r\n\r\nOnline speakers. They can see their audience\u2019s reaction and play to it.\u00a0 Technologies allow the speaker to still see what\u2019s going on with other people and see what they need to do to reach them more effectively.\r\n\r\nSpeakers online can answer questions in the same way as they can in person. Mention the text box in a Skype or Zoom session.\r\n\r\nSpeakers online can learn to use gestures and body language.\u00a0 It may be different?\u00a0\u00a0 The camera can capture the speaker\u2019s facial expression so that everyone in the audience can see.\u00a0 In an auditorium or a different public speaking place, may not be able to see all expressions unless you\u2019re sitting right up front?\u00a0 And more professional presentations, such as TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.\r\n<h3>\u00a0Sarah\u2019s Comments:<\/h3>\r\n<em>I realized that I was \u201con to\u201d something here, and that I had a more interesting idea to pursue.\u00a0 I started to read a little bit about teaching public speaking online, from very general sources, just to get some more ideas.\u00a0 The assignment was not for a full research essay, so I did not go deeply into research, although I found out that this topic actually could be researched more fully.\u00a0 I felt that I finally had something that I could develop on my own, based on my own experience and observations, and supported by a little bit of relevant research.<\/em>\r\n<h2>Third Draft<\/h2>\r\nPublic Speaking courses, in college and in trainings from such respected sources as Toastmasters, often focus on the same key concepts knowing your purpose and audience, use knowledge of that audience to choose your content and approach, organizing your speech, use visuals, control your gestures, and responding to your audience\u2019s comments and questions.\u00a0 The speaker\u2019s awareness of and relationship to audience, in the moment, is critical.\u00a0 Public speaking of this kind has a long and interesting history, stretching back to Aristotle and the ancient Greeks, who were expected to be able to speak as informed members of the citizenry.\u00a0 Aristotle taught public speaking concepts of ethos, logos, and pathos as students gathered around him to learn to persuade others using public speaking. But Aristotle and others could not have imagined public speaking as it exists today: tweets, YouTube, Skype, all of which increase and complicate public speaking. Public speaking as we know it has changed drastically, and public speaking instruction has changed as well, moving from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about the definition of public speaking and the validity of online instruction in this field, which I hope to explain and clarify in this essay.\r\n\r\nMany people feel that public speaking cannot be taught online, because they say a speaker needs a live audience response as critical to the learning process.\u00a0 Wikipedia defines public speaking as \u201cthe process or act of performing a speech to a live audience.\u201d\u00a0 Opponents of online public speaking courses argue the need for a live, real-time audience for learning public speaking.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to address questions with some immediacy, whether or not they choose to address them as they go along or at the end of the presentation. Speakers need to have an environment in which they can move around and manipulate their body language and gestures to the desired effect.\u00a0 And speakers need to be able to manage the unexpected, which occurs in a live environment, to show their ability to analyze and adapt, two important skills related to public speaking.\r\n\r\nIf you look at these arguments one by one, you can see that these skills may be addressed online.\u00a0 The need to address questions with immediacy can be taught and learned online.\u00a0 Consider the text box in a Skype or Zoom session, which allows the speaker to see questions as they occur and to adapt and respond.\u00a0 The argument that tone does not come into play in written questions is not valid \u2013 you can often tell if the writer is confused or sympathetic or angry just by the words being used, and the speaker can reply.\u00a0 Skype and Zoom types of tools and delivery address the argument of managing the unexpected, as audience response is immediate, and needs to be addressed.\r\n\r\nPublic speaking can be taught online because online speakers may very well be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Skype, Zoom, and other technologies offer real-time, audio and visual experiences that link speaker and audience.\u00a0 Although they are dispersed and not in the same room the speaker can still see what\u2019s going on with other participants and can see from their attitudes and expressions whether they are engaged and whether tone or content needs to be altered even in asynchronous environments, audience response may be so immediate that the speaker can respond in almost-real time (refer to Rosanne\u2019s, the president\u2019s, or any other public figure\u2019s posts, quick audience reaction on Twitter, and her quick responses).\u00a0 The environment may not be exactly the same as a room with everyone in it, the skills of observation, situation analysis, and adjustment can still be taught and learned online.\r\n\r\nSpeakers online can learn to use gestures and body language.\u00a0 The camera can capture the speaker\u2019s face so that everyone in the audience can see, unlike a live speech in which only audience members in the front rows may really get the full experience of the speaker\u2019s expressions. And more professional presentations, like TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.\r\n\r\nAn important piece to learn in a public speaking course is how to manage anxiety as a public speaker.\u00a0 Studies have been done on anxiety levels and online learning of public speaking but many studies do show a lower anxiety occurs for speakers online.\r\n\r\nStudent performance is the main way to judge learning \u2013 do students in an online public speaking course perform as well as those who study public speaking in a traditional classroom? (mention a study here \u2013 need to go back and find it, it was a little bit old, so decide if it\u2019s usable or not)\r\n\r\nFinally, a dissertation study brought in evidence from students who judged their own learning in an online public speaking class. Linardopoulos (2010) concluded that students themselves felt that they learned as much or more in an online public speaking class than they would have learned in a classroom, and would recommend that learning format to others.\r\n\r\nPublic speaking can be taught \u2013 and learned \u2013 online.\r\n\r\nGiven that we now live in a digital age, and that a Pew survey (2018) shows that 77% of American adults are online daily, isn\u2019t teaching public speaking online the responsible thing to do?\r\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\r\n<em>I knew that I had to do more to finalize this essay, but I felt at this point that I had something both workable and more interesting than where I started out.\u00a0 I ignored the draft for a day, and then tried to go back to it from a fresh perspective, in order to create the final version, which is what I handed in as my assignment. <\/em>\r\n<h2>Final Draft<\/h2>\r\n<p style=\"text-align: center\"><strong>Public Speaking Online?<\/strong><\/p>\r\nPublic Speaking courses, in college and in trainings from such respected sources as Toastmasters, often focus on the same key concepts:\u00a0 knowing your purpose and audience, using knowledge of that audience to choose your content and approach, organizing your speech, using visuals, controlling your gestures, and responding to your audience\u2019s comments and questions.\u00a0 The speaker\u2019s awareness of and relationship to audience, in the moment, is critical.\u00a0 Public speaking of this kind has a long and interesting history, stretching back to Aristotle and the ancient Greeks, who were expected to be able to speak as informed members of the citizenry.\u00a0 Aristotle taught public speaking concepts of\u00a0 ethos, logos, and pathos, which are still taught today, as students gathered around him to learn to persuade others via public speaking. But Aristotle and others could not have imagined public speaking as it exists today: tweets, YouTube, Skype, and various forms of digital media, all of which increase and perhaps complicate the speaker\u2019s relationship to the audience. Public speaking as we know it has changed drastically, and public speaking instruction has changed as well, moving from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about the definition of public speaking and the validity of online instruction in this field.\u00a0 However, I believe that public speaking can be taught online.\r\n\r\nMany academics and rhetoricians do feel that public speaking cannot be taught online, citing the need for live audience response as critical to the learning process.\u00a0 Even Wikipedia defines public speaking as \u201cthe process or act of performing a speech to a live audience.\u201d\u00a0 Opponents of online public speaking courses argue the need for a live, real-time audience for learning many aspects of public speaking.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to address questions with some immediacy, whether or not they choose to address them as they go along or at the end of the presentation. Speakers need to have an environment in which they can move around and manipulate their body language and gestures to the desired effect.\u00a0 And speakers need to be able to manage the unexpected, which occurs in a live environment, to show their ability to analyze and adapt, two important skills related to public speaking.\r\n\r\nYet if you look at these arguments one by one, you can see that these skills may be addressed online, albeit in a slightly different way.\u00a0 Public speaking can be taught online because, first of all, online speakers may very well be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Skype, Zoom, and other technologies offer real-time, audio and visual experiences that link speaker and audience.\u00a0 Although they are dispersed and not in the same room the speaker can still see what\u2019s going on with other participants and can see from their attitudes and expressions whether they are engaged and whether tone or content needs to be altered.\u00a0 Even in asynchronous environments, audience response may be so immediate that the speaker can respond in almost-real time (think of Rosanne\u2019s posts, quick audience reaction on Twitter, and her quick responses).\u00a0 The environment may not be exactly the same as a room with everyone in it, the skills of observation, situation analysis, and adjustment can still be taught and learned online.\r\n\r\nJust as with the need to see an audience, the need to address questions with immediacy can also be taught and learned online.\u00a0 Consider the text box in a Skype or Zoom session, which allows the speaker, who most often is the one hosting and controlling the session, to see questions as they occur and to adapt and respond.\u00a0 The argument that tone does not come into play in written questions is not valid \u2013 you can often tell if the writer is confused or sympathetic or angry just by the words being used, and the speaker can reply accordingly.\u00a0 Skype and Zoom types of tools and delivery also address the argument of managing the unexpected, as audience response is immediate, and needs to be addressed.\r\n\r\nWhile it is true that good digital presentation, either live or taped, may not allow as much movement around a stage or podium, speakers online can learn to use gestures and body language effectively.\u00a0 The camera can capture nuances in the speaker\u2019s facial expression so that everyone in the audience can see, unlike a live speech in which only audience members in the front rows may really get the full experience of the speaker\u2019s expressions. And more professional presentations, such as TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 thus creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.\r\n\r\nStudying public speaking online, and having to speak online, also brings additional benefits to the learner as well as his\/her audience.\u00a0 An important piece to learn in a public speaking course is how to manage anxiety as a public speaker.\u00a0 In a dissertation study, Gill found that \u201cresults from the entire participant sample did indicate the online public speaking course might assist in lowering participants\u2019 public speaking anxiety levels.\u201d\u00a0 Other studies have been done on anxiety levels and online learning of public speaking, with varied results, but many studies do show a lower anxiety occurs for speakers online.\r\n\r\nStudent performance is the main way to judge learning \u2013 do students in an online public speaking course perform as well as those who study public speaking in a traditional classroom? A study by Clark and Jones showed \u201cexpert evaluations of students\u2019 public speaking ability at the end of the course did not differ significantly for the two formats\u201d (109). Online tools have evolved drastically since 2001; it may be safe to assume that these findings still hold true in an environment in which working online and digitally is so much easier and more intuitive.\r\n\r\nFinally, another dissertation study brought in evidence from students themselves, who judged their own learning in an online public speaking class. Linardopoulos concluded that students themselves felt that they learned as much or more in an online public speaking class than they would have learned in a classroom, and would recommend that learning format to others.\r\n\r\nPublic speaking can be taught \u2013 and learned \u2013 online, especially if you use Merriam-Webster\u2019s definition of public speaking: (quoted from <a href=\"https:\/\/www.merriam-webster.com\/dictionary\/public%20speaking\">https:\/\/www.merriam-webster.com\/dictionary\/public%20speaking<\/a>)\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>the act or process of making speeches in public<\/li>\r\n \t<li>the art of effective oral communication with an audience<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\nGiven that we now live in a digital age, and that a 2018 Pew survey article by Perrin and Jiang shows that 77% of American adults are online daily, isn\u2019t teaching public speaking online the responsible thing to do?\r\n\r\n<strong>Works Cited<\/strong>\r\n\r\nClark, Ruth Anne, and David Jones. \u201cA Comparison of Traditional and Online Formats in a Public Speaking Course.\u201d <em>Communication Education,<\/em> vol. 50, no. 2, 2001, pp. 109-124.\r\n\r\nGill, L.K. <em>The Effect of Online Communication Instruction and Coaching on Undergraduate Students\u2019 Public Speaking Anxiety<\/em>. 2015. Creighton University, PhD dissertation. <em>ProQuest<\/em>, http:\/\/library.esc.edu\u2019login?url=https:\/\/search-proquest-com.library.esc.edu\/docview\/1748991579?accountid=8067.\r\n\r\nLinardopoulos, Nick. \u201cTeaching and Learning Public Speaking Online.\u201d <em>MERLOT Journal of Online Learning and Teaching<\/em>, vol. 6, no. 1, 2010, pp. 198-209.\r\n\r\nPerrin, Andrew, and Jiang, JingJing. \u201cAbout a Quarter of U.S. Adults Say they are \u2018Almost Constantly\u2019 Online.\u201d FactTank. http:\/\/www.pewresearch.org\/fact-tank\/2018\/03\/14\/about-a-quarter-of-americans-report-going-online-almost-constantly\/\r\n\r\nWikipedia contributors. \"Public speaking.\"\u00a0<em>Wikipedia, The Free Encyclopedia<\/em>. Wikipedia, The Free Encyclopedia, 12 Jun. 2018. Web. 14 Jun. 2018.","rendered":"<p><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignleft wp-image-2776 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/14175410\/CW-OER-public-speaking-300x212.jpg\" alt=\"decorative image\" width=\"300\" height=\"212\" \/><\/p>\n<p>Read the following, which shows the process one student, Sarah,\u00a0went through, from prewriting to final draft. Sarah&#8217;s comments on her process are also included.\u00a0 Sarah ended up writing an essay about public speaking online.<\/p>\n<p><a href=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/3033\/2018\/06\/28163706\/CW-Sarahs-Essay-in-Process-final-version.docx\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"attachment noopener wp-att-3306\">Download Sarah&#8217;s Essay in Process<\/a><\/p>\n<p>&#8211; or read below &#8211;<\/p>\n<h1>Sarah\u2019s Essay in Process<strong>\u00a0<\/strong><\/h1>\n<h2>Freewriting<\/h2>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td>Don\u2019t know, don\u2019t know, don\u2019t know. I\u2019m afraid that I\u2019m doing this wrong.\u00a0 Fears.\u00a0 Falling and bumping my head.\u00a0 Traffic jams.\u00a0 Aggressive dogs that are not on leashes.\u00a0 Speaking to large groups.\u00a0 I\u2019m focusing on communications, and I think that I should do a public speaking course to develop my skill and overcome my fears, even though I may not want to.\u00a0 Courses.\u00a0 Courses that I need vs. courses that I want to take.\u00a0 Photography.\u00a0 Public history.\u00a0 Digital communications.\u00a0 I really like developing websites and updating my blog on cooking.\u00a0 I follow other blogs as well, travel, cooking, moms juggling work and family.\u00a0 My own blog on cooking has gotten a bit of attention recently and locally, because I focus on using local produce in different recipes, and have written about local farms and restaurants. Even asked to talk to some local groups in person, although I don\u2019t know about that. It\u2019s a real struggle sometimes.\u00a0 Writing, on the other hand, comes easily, at least in terms of blogging. Don\u2019t know\u2026\u00a0 maybe essay writing will be different, because of the length? Used to writing really short pieces for online. Photography is great to support those pieces. I took a photography intro course at the community college years ago when I started to take college courses.\u00a0 Really enjoyed it and want to take more. We\u2019ll see\u2026\u00a0 public speaking, though, is something that I\u2019m afraid of.\u00a0 But I do know that I need to study it, especially as a student of communications, because it\u2019s such an important method of communicating. And I am being asked to speak locally to some groups.\u00a0 Library lunchtime series, community college nutrition interest group for seniors, farm market program. Scares me, though.\u00a0 Talked to my husband about it. \u00a0Again, we\u2019ll see\u2026<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\n<p><em>After looking at this prewriting and a series of other prewritings, I saw that I was focusing on two topics, 1) my love of photography, and 2) my fear of public speaking.\u00a0 I decided to try to compare them, and started working with my prewritings in the following way.<\/em><\/p>\n<p><strong>\u00a0<\/strong><strong>Working with Prewriting <\/strong><\/p>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td><strong>Photography <\/strong><\/td>\n<td><strong>Public speaking<\/strong><\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Focuses totally on images \u2013 no words<\/td>\n<td>Use images, but focuses on words<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Important piece of communication<\/td>\n<td>Important piece of communication<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Can be done any time<\/td>\n<td>Needs to have an audience \u2013 but can it be done any time for an audience to access asynchronously?<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Like it because I am in control of the image<\/td>\n<td>Don\u2019t like it because I feel that I\u2019m not in control of the audience<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Calms me<\/td>\n<td>Makes me anxious<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\n<p><em>Because I came up with some comparisons, my initial impulse was to write an essay that compared photography and public speaking.\u00a0 The following is a very, very rough draft, trying to get my thoughts into more of an essay form.<\/em><\/p>\n<h2>Initial Draft<\/h2>\n<p>Need an introduction\u2026<\/p>\n<p>Working thesis: Photography and public speaking are both similar and different.<\/p>\n<p>Photography and public speaking are both important means of communication.\u00a0 Photos bring messages universally.\u00a0 Who hasn\u2019t seen and responded to images of important events, ads, and more?\u00a0 Public speaking is also an important means of communication seen in the many press conferences on television and the many local events that attract others.\u00a0 Audience members interested in a topic are willing to go and hear a speaker talk about gardening or the history of immigration in the area or whatever \u2013 and they usually learn from the public speaker, just as they learn from any images.<\/p>\n<p>Photography can be done any time and when I do it, I feel calm and in control.\u00a0 I can control the image, and can re-take it (if possible).\u00a0 Use examples here of images I have taken.\u00a0 Also bring in some public response?<\/p>\n<p>Public speaking may not be done any time, and when I do it, which is as infrequently as possible, I do not feel calm and in control.\u00a0 Bring in examples of the few times I was asked to speak.\u00a0 My blogging is a form of public speaking, but that\u2019s in writing and not in real time, so I am calmer and more in control.<\/p>\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\n<p><em>I developed a working thesis, and then wrote this out relatively quickly.\u00a0 Then I got stuck.\u00a0 I knew I had a thesis, but what I wrote seemed kind of rambling to me, and kind of \u201cblah.\u201d\u00a0 I wasn\u2019t writing about anything really insightful, not that I had to \u2013 I certainly could write about anything I wanted to, and absolutely did not have to write about world-important events.\u00a0 In fact, we were told to avoid \u201cusual\u201d college essay topics like television\u2019s effect on children, alcohol\/drug use, etc.\u00a0 But I just felt stuck and unable to go farther.\u00a0 I kept going back to the three-part thesis idea, and thought that I really didn\u2019t have much insight here. I talked with my husband, and let him read my initial thoughts, to see if he could give me some ideas.\u00a0 He said something that sparked my thinking: \u201cYou don\u2019t really have to public speak in real time anymore.\u201d\u00a0 Hmmm\u2026 I mentioned to him that taking an online course, then, in public speaking, might be the route for me to conquer my fears, and his reaction was \u201cReally?\u00a0 Even though you don\u2019t have to speak in real time, don\u2019t you have to learn public speaking in real time, and actually give speeches to people who are right there?\u00a0 Otherwise, how will you know you can do it?\u201d\u00a0 This got me thinking.\u00a0 I now had more of a debatable topic and thought I could develop more of an assertion, and maybe even some insight for readers to keep thinking about.\u00a0 I developed my next draft.<\/em><\/p>\n<h2>Second Draft<\/h2>\n<p>Public speaking teaching has moved from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about just what public speaking is and if it\u2019s worth it to study it online.<\/p>\n<p>Online speakers. They can see their audience\u2019s reaction and play to it.\u00a0 Technologies allow the speaker to still see what\u2019s going on with other people and see what they need to do to reach them more effectively.<\/p>\n<p>Speakers online can answer questions in the same way as they can in person. Mention the text box in a Skype or Zoom session.<\/p>\n<p>Speakers online can learn to use gestures and body language.\u00a0 It may be different?\u00a0\u00a0 The camera can capture the speaker\u2019s facial expression so that everyone in the audience can see.\u00a0 In an auditorium or a different public speaking place, may not be able to see all expressions unless you\u2019re sitting right up front?\u00a0 And more professional presentations, such as TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.<\/p>\n<h3>\u00a0Sarah\u2019s Comments:<\/h3>\n<p><em>I realized that I was \u201con to\u201d something here, and that I had a more interesting idea to pursue.\u00a0 I started to read a little bit about teaching public speaking online, from very general sources, just to get some more ideas.\u00a0 The assignment was not for a full research essay, so I did not go deeply into research, although I found out that this topic actually could be researched more fully.\u00a0 I felt that I finally had something that I could develop on my own, based on my own experience and observations, and supported by a little bit of relevant research.<\/em><\/p>\n<h2>Third Draft<\/h2>\n<p>Public Speaking courses, in college and in trainings from such respected sources as Toastmasters, often focus on the same key concepts knowing your purpose and audience, use knowledge of that audience to choose your content and approach, organizing your speech, use visuals, control your gestures, and responding to your audience\u2019s comments and questions.\u00a0 The speaker\u2019s awareness of and relationship to audience, in the moment, is critical.\u00a0 Public speaking of this kind has a long and interesting history, stretching back to Aristotle and the ancient Greeks, who were expected to be able to speak as informed members of the citizenry.\u00a0 Aristotle taught public speaking concepts of ethos, logos, and pathos as students gathered around him to learn to persuade others using public speaking. But Aristotle and others could not have imagined public speaking as it exists today: tweets, YouTube, Skype, all of which increase and complicate public speaking. Public speaking as we know it has changed drastically, and public speaking instruction has changed as well, moving from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about the definition of public speaking and the validity of online instruction in this field, which I hope to explain and clarify in this essay.<\/p>\n<p>Many people feel that public speaking cannot be taught online, because they say a speaker needs a live audience response as critical to the learning process.\u00a0 Wikipedia defines public speaking as \u201cthe process or act of performing a speech to a live audience.\u201d\u00a0 Opponents of online public speaking courses argue the need for a live, real-time audience for learning public speaking.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to address questions with some immediacy, whether or not they choose to address them as they go along or at the end of the presentation. Speakers need to have an environment in which they can move around and manipulate their body language and gestures to the desired effect.\u00a0 And speakers need to be able to manage the unexpected, which occurs in a live environment, to show their ability to analyze and adapt, two important skills related to public speaking.<\/p>\n<p>If you look at these arguments one by one, you can see that these skills may be addressed online.\u00a0 The need to address questions with immediacy can be taught and learned online.\u00a0 Consider the text box in a Skype or Zoom session, which allows the speaker to see questions as they occur and to adapt and respond.\u00a0 The argument that tone does not come into play in written questions is not valid \u2013 you can often tell if the writer is confused or sympathetic or angry just by the words being used, and the speaker can reply.\u00a0 Skype and Zoom types of tools and delivery address the argument of managing the unexpected, as audience response is immediate, and needs to be addressed.<\/p>\n<p>Public speaking can be taught online because online speakers may very well be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Skype, Zoom, and other technologies offer real-time, audio and visual experiences that link speaker and audience.\u00a0 Although they are dispersed and not in the same room the speaker can still see what\u2019s going on with other participants and can see from their attitudes and expressions whether they are engaged and whether tone or content needs to be altered even in asynchronous environments, audience response may be so immediate that the speaker can respond in almost-real time (refer to Rosanne\u2019s, the president\u2019s, or any other public figure\u2019s posts, quick audience reaction on Twitter, and her quick responses).\u00a0 The environment may not be exactly the same as a room with everyone in it, the skills of observation, situation analysis, and adjustment can still be taught and learned online.<\/p>\n<p>Speakers online can learn to use gestures and body language.\u00a0 The camera can capture the speaker\u2019s face so that everyone in the audience can see, unlike a live speech in which only audience members in the front rows may really get the full experience of the speaker\u2019s expressions. And more professional presentations, like TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.<\/p>\n<p>An important piece to learn in a public speaking course is how to manage anxiety as a public speaker.\u00a0 Studies have been done on anxiety levels and online learning of public speaking but many studies do show a lower anxiety occurs for speakers online.<\/p>\n<p>Student performance is the main way to judge learning \u2013 do students in an online public speaking course perform as well as those who study public speaking in a traditional classroom? (mention a study here \u2013 need to go back and find it, it was a little bit old, so decide if it\u2019s usable or not)<\/p>\n<p>Finally, a dissertation study brought in evidence from students who judged their own learning in an online public speaking class. Linardopoulos (2010) concluded that students themselves felt that they learned as much or more in an online public speaking class than they would have learned in a classroom, and would recommend that learning format to others.<\/p>\n<p>Public speaking can be taught \u2013 and learned \u2013 online.<\/p>\n<p>Given that we now live in a digital age, and that a Pew survey (2018) shows that 77% of American adults are online daily, isn\u2019t teaching public speaking online the responsible thing to do?<\/p>\n<h3>Sarah\u2019s comments:<\/h3>\n<p><em>I knew that I had to do more to finalize this essay, but I felt at this point that I had something both workable and more interesting than where I started out.\u00a0 I ignored the draft for a day, and then tried to go back to it from a fresh perspective, in order to create the final version, which is what I handed in as my assignment. <\/em><\/p>\n<h2>Final Draft<\/h2>\n<p style=\"text-align: center\"><strong>Public Speaking Online?<\/strong><\/p>\n<p>Public Speaking courses, in college and in trainings from such respected sources as Toastmasters, often focus on the same key concepts:\u00a0 knowing your purpose and audience, using knowledge of that audience to choose your content and approach, organizing your speech, using visuals, controlling your gestures, and responding to your audience\u2019s comments and questions.\u00a0 The speaker\u2019s awareness of and relationship to audience, in the moment, is critical.\u00a0 Public speaking of this kind has a long and interesting history, stretching back to Aristotle and the ancient Greeks, who were expected to be able to speak as informed members of the citizenry.\u00a0 Aristotle taught public speaking concepts of\u00a0 ethos, logos, and pathos, which are still taught today, as students gathered around him to learn to persuade others via public speaking. But Aristotle and others could not have imagined public speaking as it exists today: tweets, YouTube, Skype, and various forms of digital media, all of which increase and perhaps complicate the speaker\u2019s relationship to the audience. Public speaking as we know it has changed drastically, and public speaking instruction has changed as well, moving from in-person to online.\u00a0 This has opened up a debate about the definition of public speaking and the validity of online instruction in this field.\u00a0 However, I believe that public speaking can be taught online.<\/p>\n<p>Many academics and rhetoricians do feel that public speaking cannot be taught online, citing the need for live audience response as critical to the learning process.\u00a0 Even Wikipedia defines public speaking as \u201cthe process or act of performing a speech to a live audience.\u201d\u00a0 Opponents of online public speaking courses argue the need for a live, real-time audience for learning many aspects of public speaking.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Speakers need to be able to address questions with some immediacy, whether or not they choose to address them as they go along or at the end of the presentation. Speakers need to have an environment in which they can move around and manipulate their body language and gestures to the desired effect.\u00a0 And speakers need to be able to manage the unexpected, which occurs in a live environment, to show their ability to analyze and adapt, two important skills related to public speaking.<\/p>\n<p>Yet if you look at these arguments one by one, you can see that these skills may be addressed online, albeit in a slightly different way.\u00a0 Public speaking can be taught online because, first of all, online speakers may very well be able to see their audience\u2019s reaction and adjust their tone and message accordingly.\u00a0 Skype, Zoom, and other technologies offer real-time, audio and visual experiences that link speaker and audience.\u00a0 Although they are dispersed and not in the same room the speaker can still see what\u2019s going on with other participants and can see from their attitudes and expressions whether they are engaged and whether tone or content needs to be altered.\u00a0 Even in asynchronous environments, audience response may be so immediate that the speaker can respond in almost-real time (think of Rosanne\u2019s posts, quick audience reaction on Twitter, and her quick responses).\u00a0 The environment may not be exactly the same as a room with everyone in it, the skills of observation, situation analysis, and adjustment can still be taught and learned online.<\/p>\n<p>Just as with the need to see an audience, the need to address questions with immediacy can also be taught and learned online.\u00a0 Consider the text box in a Skype or Zoom session, which allows the speaker, who most often is the one hosting and controlling the session, to see questions as they occur and to adapt and respond.\u00a0 The argument that tone does not come into play in written questions is not valid \u2013 you can often tell if the writer is confused or sympathetic or angry just by the words being used, and the speaker can reply accordingly.\u00a0 Skype and Zoom types of tools and delivery also address the argument of managing the unexpected, as audience response is immediate, and needs to be addressed.<\/p>\n<p>While it is true that good digital presentation, either live or taped, may not allow as much movement around a stage or podium, speakers online can learn to use gestures and body language effectively.\u00a0 The camera can capture nuances in the speaker\u2019s facial expression so that everyone in the audience can see, unlike a live speech in which only audience members in the front rows may really get the full experience of the speaker\u2019s expressions. And more professional presentations, such as TedTalks, can actually be filmed so that the speaker\u2019s whole body is shown as it moves around a stage,\u00a0 thus creating a feeling of actually being in the audience as a participant.<\/p>\n<p>Studying public speaking online, and having to speak online, also brings additional benefits to the learner as well as his\/her audience.\u00a0 An important piece to learn in a public speaking course is how to manage anxiety as a public speaker.\u00a0 In a dissertation study, Gill found that \u201cresults from the entire participant sample did indicate the online public speaking course might assist in lowering participants\u2019 public speaking anxiety levels.\u201d\u00a0 Other studies have been done on anxiety levels and online learning of public speaking, with varied results, but many studies do show a lower anxiety occurs for speakers online.<\/p>\n<p>Student performance is the main way to judge learning \u2013 do students in an online public speaking course perform as well as those who study public speaking in a traditional classroom? A study by Clark and Jones showed \u201cexpert evaluations of students\u2019 public speaking ability at the end of the course did not differ significantly for the two formats\u201d (109). Online tools have evolved drastically since 2001; it may be safe to assume that these findings still hold true in an environment in which working online and digitally is so much easier and more intuitive.<\/p>\n<p>Finally, another dissertation study brought in evidence from students themselves, who judged their own learning in an online public speaking class. Linardopoulos concluded that students themselves felt that they learned as much or more in an online public speaking class than they would have learned in a classroom, and would recommend that learning format to others.<\/p>\n<p>Public speaking can be taught \u2013 and learned \u2013 online, especially if you use Merriam-Webster\u2019s definition of public speaking: (quoted from <a href=\"https:\/\/www.merriam-webster.com\/dictionary\/public%20speaking\">https:\/\/www.merriam-webster.com\/dictionary\/public%20speaking<\/a>)<\/p>\n<ol>\n<li>the act or process of making speeches in public<\/li>\n<li>the art of effective oral communication with an audience<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p>Given that we now live in a digital age, and that a 2018 Pew survey article by Perrin and Jiang shows that 77% of American adults are online daily, isn\u2019t teaching public speaking online the responsible thing to do?<\/p>\n<p><strong>Works Cited<\/strong><\/p>\n<p>Clark, Ruth Anne, and David Jones. \u201cA Comparison of Traditional and Online Formats in a Public Speaking Course.\u201d <em>Communication Education,<\/em> vol. 50, no. 2, 2001, pp. 109-124.<\/p>\n<p>Gill, L.K. <em>The Effect of Online Communication Instruction and Coaching on Undergraduate Students\u2019 Public Speaking Anxiety<\/em>. 2015. Creighton University, PhD dissertation. <em>ProQuest<\/em>, http:\/\/library.esc.edu\u2019login?url=https:\/\/search-proquest-com.library.esc.edu\/docview\/1748991579?accountid=8067.<\/p>\n<p>Linardopoulos, Nick. \u201cTeaching and Learning Public Speaking Online.\u201d <em>MERLOT Journal of Online Learning and Teaching<\/em>, vol. 6, no. 1, 2010, pp. 198-209.<\/p>\n<p>Perrin, Andrew, and Jiang, JingJing. \u201cAbout a Quarter of U.S. Adults Say they are \u2018Almost Constantly\u2019 Online.\u201d FactTank. http:\/\/www.pewresearch.org\/fact-tank\/2018\/03\/14\/about-a-quarter-of-americans-report-going-online-almost-constantly\/<\/p>\n<p>Wikipedia contributors. &#8220;Public speaking.&#8221;\u00a0<em>Wikipedia, The Free Encyclopedia<\/em>. Wikipedia, The Free Encyclopedia, 12 Jun. 2018. 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