{"id":170,"date":"2017-07-20T16:30:15","date_gmt":"2017-07-20T16:30:15","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-geneseo-styleguide2\/chapter\/lower-order-concerns-for-proofreading\/"},"modified":"2017-07-20T16:30:15","modified_gmt":"2017-07-20T16:30:15","slug":"lower-order-concerns-for-proofreading","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-geneseo-styleguide2\/chapter\/lower-order-concerns-for-proofreading\/","title":{"raw":"Lower Order Concerns for Proofreading","rendered":"Lower Order Concerns for Proofreading"},"content":{"raw":"<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Previously we examined\u00a0higher order concerns (HOCs) as part of the\u00a0revision stage of the writing process. Once we move to the proofreading stage, it's time to consider the lower order concerns (LOCs). The difference is simple: HOCs are global issues, or issues that affect how a reader understands the entire paper; LOCs are issues that don\u2019t <i>necessarily<\/i> interrupt understanding of the writing by themselves.<\/span><\/p>\n\n<table class=\"t1\" cellpadding=\"0\" style=\"border-spacing: 0px;\"><tbody><tr><th class=\"th1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>HOCs<\/b><\/span><\/p>\n<\/th>\n<th class=\"th2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>LOCs<\/b><\/span><\/p>\n<\/th>\n<\/tr><tr><td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Audience<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Grammar<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr><tr><td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Thesis statement<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Punctuation<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr><tr><td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Organization<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Citation<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr><tr><td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Focus<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Spelling<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr><tr><td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Development of ideas<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sentence structure<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr><\/tbody><\/table><p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">You may find yourself thinking, \u201cWell, it depends,\u201d or, \u201cBut what if\u2026?\u201d You\u2019re absolutely right to think so. These lists are just guidelines; every writer will have a different hierarchy of concerns. Always try to think in terms of, \u201cDoes this affect my understanding of the writing?\u201d<\/span><\/p>\n\n<h2 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Are HOCs More Important than LOCs?<\/b><\/span><\/h2>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">No, not necessarily. HOCs tend to interrupt a reader\u2019s understanding of the writing, and that\u2019s why they need to be addressed first. However, if a LOC becomes a major obstacle, then it naturally becomes a higher priority.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Think of an example of how a Lower Order Concern could become a Higher Order Concern.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Here are some other issues you might face. These may be more difficult to categorize, and they may largely depend on the writing. If you think, \u201cIt depends,\u201d make notes about the circumstances under which these issues could be a HOC or a LOC.<\/span><\/p>\n\n<ul><li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evaluating sources<\/span><\/li>\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">citation method<\/span><\/li>\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"> style<\/span><\/li>\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">paragraph structure<\/span><\/li>\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">active vs. passive voice<\/span><\/li>\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">format<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul><h2 class=\"p1\">How to Address LOCs<\/h2>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong><img class=\"alignright size-medium wp-image-998\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/2232\/2017\/07\/20163013\/5123535399_c46dfac5d2_z-1-300x200.jpg\" alt=\"Two students sitting at a round table in front of a bank of windows\" width=\"300\" height=\"200\"\/>Analyze your use of source material<\/strong>. Check any paraphrases and quotations against the original texts. Quotations should replicate the original author\u2019s words, while paraphrases should maintain the original author\u2019s meaning but have altered language and sentence structures. For each source, confirm that you have adhered to the preferred style guide for the target journal or other venue.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Consider individual sentences in terms of grammar, mechanics, and punctuation<\/strong>. Many LOCs can be revised by isolating and examining different elements of the text. Read the text sentence by sentence, considering the grammar and sentence structure. Remember, a sentence may be grammatically correct and still confuse readers.<\/span><span class=\"s2\"><sup>\u00a0<\/sup><\/span><span class=\"s1\">If you notice a pattern\u2014say, a tendency to misplace modifiers or add unnecessary commas\u2014read the paper looking only for that error. Read the document backwards, word for word, looking for spelling errors. Throughout the writing process and especially at this stage of revision, keep a dictionary, a thesaurus, and a writing handbook nearby.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Strategies such as reading aloud and seeking feedback are useful at all points in the revision process<\/strong>. Reading aloud will give you distance from the text and prevent you from skimming over what is actually written on the page. This strategy will help you to identify both HOCs, such as missing concepts, and LOCs, such as typos. Additionally, seeking feedback will allow you to test your ideas and writing on real readers. Seek feedback from readers both inside and outside of your target audience in order to gain different perspectives.<\/span><\/p>\n\n<h2 class=\"p1\">Proofreading Advice<\/h2>\nThe following video features two student tutors from the Writing and Reading Center at Fresno City College. In addition to great guidance about proofreading strategies, they also offer insights about what to expect when\u00a0working with Writing Center tutors.\n\nhttps:\/\/youtu.be\/STa5W4gm2qY?t=17s","rendered":"<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Previously we examined\u00a0higher order concerns (HOCs) as part of the\u00a0revision stage of the writing process. Once we move to the proofreading stage, it&#8217;s time to consider the lower order concerns (LOCs). The difference is simple: HOCs are global issues, or issues that affect how a reader understands the entire paper; LOCs are issues that don\u2019t <i>necessarily<\/i> interrupt understanding of the writing by themselves.<\/span><\/p>\n<table class=\"t1\" cellpadding=\"0\" style=\"border-spacing: 0px;\">\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<th class=\"th1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>HOCs<\/b><\/span><\/p>\n<\/th>\n<th class=\"th2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>LOCs<\/b><\/span><\/p>\n<\/th>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Audience<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Grammar<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Thesis statement<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Punctuation<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Organization<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Citation<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Focus<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Spelling<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td class=\"td1\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Development of ideas<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<td class=\"td2\" valign=\"top\">\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sentence structure<\/span><\/p>\n<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">You may find yourself thinking, \u201cWell, it depends,\u201d or, \u201cBut what if\u2026?\u201d You\u2019re absolutely right to think so. These lists are just guidelines; every writer will have a different hierarchy of concerns. Always try to think in terms of, \u201cDoes this affect my understanding of the writing?\u201d<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Are HOCs More Important than LOCs?<\/b><\/span><\/h2>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">No, not necessarily. HOCs tend to interrupt a reader\u2019s understanding of the writing, and that\u2019s why they need to be addressed first. However, if a LOC becomes a major obstacle, then it naturally becomes a higher priority.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Think of an example of how a Lower Order Concern could become a Higher Order Concern.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Here are some other issues you might face. These may be more difficult to categorize, and they may largely depend on the writing. If you think, \u201cIt depends,\u201d make notes about the circumstances under which these issues could be a HOC or a LOC.<\/span><\/p>\n<ul>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evaluating sources<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">citation method<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"> style<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">paragraph structure<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">active vs. passive voice<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">format<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<h2 class=\"p1\">How to Address LOCs<\/h2>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignright size-medium wp-image-998\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/2232\/2017\/07\/20163013\/5123535399_c46dfac5d2_z-1-300x200.jpg\" alt=\"Two students sitting at a round table in front of a bank of windows\" width=\"300\" height=\"200\" \/>Analyze your use of source material<\/strong>. Check any paraphrases and quotations against the original texts. Quotations should replicate the original author\u2019s words, while paraphrases should maintain the original author\u2019s meaning but have altered language and sentence structures. For each source, confirm that you have adhered to the preferred style guide for the target journal or other venue.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Consider individual sentences in terms of grammar, mechanics, and punctuation<\/strong>. Many LOCs can be revised by isolating and examining different elements of the text. Read the text sentence by sentence, considering the grammar and sentence structure. Remember, a sentence may be grammatically correct and still confuse readers.<\/span><span class=\"s2\"><sup>\u00a0<\/sup><\/span><span class=\"s1\">If you notice a pattern\u2014say, a tendency to misplace modifiers or add unnecessary commas\u2014read the paper looking only for that error. Read the document backwards, word for word, looking for spelling errors. Throughout the writing process and especially at this stage of revision, keep a dictionary, a thesaurus, and a writing handbook nearby.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Strategies such as reading aloud and seeking feedback are useful at all points in the revision process<\/strong>. Reading aloud will give you distance from the text and prevent you from skimming over what is actually written on the page. This strategy will help you to identify both HOCs, such as missing concepts, and LOCs, such as typos. Additionally, seeking feedback will allow you to test your ideas and writing on real readers. Seek feedback from readers both inside and outside of your target audience in order to gain different perspectives.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 class=\"p1\">Proofreading Advice<\/h2>\n<p>The following video features two student tutors from the Writing and Reading Center at Fresno City College. 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