{"id":685,"date":"2017-10-10T15:22:00","date_gmt":"2017-10-10T15:22:00","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-jeffersoncc-englishcomp2kscopexmaster\/?post_type=chapter&p=685"},"modified":"2017-11-20T15:16:02","modified_gmt":"2017-11-20T15:16:02","slug":"685","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-jefferson-collegecomposition\/chapter\/685\/","title":{"raw":"Integration Tips in Preparation for Peer Editing or Editing","rendered":"Integration Tips in Preparation for Peer Editing or Editing"},"content":{"raw":"The following comments can be applied either to one\u2019s paper or others\u2019 work.\u00a0 Each challenge appears enough that it is worth noting generally.\r\n\r\nWe shouldn\u2019t be seeing many quotes at the starts or ends of paragraphs for the obvious reason that they would not get integrated.\r\n\r\nYou\u2019re not complimenting a reader\u2019s intelligence if you define, say, drug use or what a computer game is.\u00a0 That would be filler.\r\n\r\nSometimes, students pad papers by overusing long quotes.\u00a0 Avoid this.\u00a0 Those quotes are rarely that well-worded.\u00a0 Mostly, they are used for filler.\u00a0 Summarize so you can set up interpretations and commentary instead..\r\n\r\nConsider that the default source use option isn\u2019t quoting, but paraphrase.\u00a0 With that in mind, we should see drafts which contain paraphrases.\r\n\r\n\u00a0<\/strong>\r\n

Topic Sentences Related to the Thesis?\u00a0 Where are These Legendary Creatures?\u00a0 <\/strong><\/h3>\r\nEarly in semesters, students get caught deferring\u2014passively letting sources take over\u2014far too much.\u00a0 I cannot tell what your topic sentences are, much less the causes\u2014even much less the ways that those causes relate<\/em> to the claim you are making.\u00a0 Partly, this is because the thesis statements were too broad and didn\u2019t argue much.\u00a0 A valid thesis must be an arguable opinion about which others may disagree.\u00a0 It\u2019s not a fact.\u00a0 If the claim you\u2019re working with is one on which a book could be based, it\u2019s too broad!\r\n\r\nConsider recognizing the boring, obvious causes outright in your introduction, but then pivoting to make some claim about lesser-known causes that must be known if the topic is to be understood properly.\u00a0 You<\/em> provide those lesser-known causes while acknowledging the ones most other people immediately think about.\u00a0 Again, show that you know how to get beyond the obvious.\u00a0 (Read a few papers and see if anyone\u2019s causes taught you anything or were surprising in how they were combined with the other causes.)\u00a0 The claims must change so that you show how the causes work together\u2014which are relatively more or less important.\r\n\r\nOh, and add transitions . . . . there ought to be a logic that you provide to readers as to how the causes are ordered.\u00a0 Causes being time-based, that should be easy, but you can focus on importance as well.\u00a0 Not all causes are equally important, so not all causes get equal attention.\r\n\r\n \r\n

Setup is Something Critical Readers Expect<\/strong><\/h3>\r\nProvide a signal phrase.\u00a0 It\u2019s a must.\u00a0 Readers need to know that you know why a source is valid.\u00a0 Don\u2019t just name drop.\u00a0 If you say that Robinson says _____ about video games, who are good readers to care about Robinson yet?\u00a0 The yet<\/em> is the key.\u00a0 It\u2019s for you to establish.\u00a0 Use a signal phrase that does this.\r\n