{"id":1064,"date":"2015-03-05T21:59:43","date_gmt":"2015-03-05T21:59:43","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.candelalearning.com\/technicalwriting1xmaster\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=1064"},"modified":"2023-03-27T23:01:18","modified_gmt":"2023-03-27T23:01:18","slug":"eliminate-unnecessary-langauage-writing-commons-2","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-jeffersoncc-technicalwriting\/chapter\/eliminate-unnecessary-langauage-writing-commons-2\/","title":{"raw":"Eliminate Unnecessary Language","rendered":"Eliminate Unnecessary Language"},"content":{"raw":"<h4>Why should unnecessary words and phrases be eliminated?<\/h4>\r\nUnnecessary words and phrases result in redundancy. A writer can achieve efficiency in writing by using concise words and phrases that denote clear meaning. Each word should contribute to the argument and purpose of an assignment; if a word or phrase can be removed from a sentence without affecting its meaning, it should be eliminated.\r\n<h4>How can unnecessary words or phrases be eliminated?<\/h4>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Revise redundant phrases, synonymous terms, and unnecessary word pairs.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Quickly speeding (s<em>peeding<\/em> implies quickness)<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Young teenage mothers (<em>young<\/em> and <em>teenage<\/em> are synonyms)<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Financial cost (<em>financial<\/em> and <em>cost<\/em> both imply money)<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Revise redundant terms in order to be more efficient.\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><strong>Redundant<\/strong>: Young adults should <em>self-assess<\/em> their situation before making a <em>big<\/em>, <em>life-changing\u00a0<\/em>decision.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Revised<\/strong>: Young adults should <em>assess<\/em> their situation before making a <em>major<\/em> decision.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Remove redundant adjectives and adverbs; use only those that contribute to the intended message.\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><strong>Overuse of adjectives<\/strong>: The <em>large, angry, noisy crowd<\/em> stormed the Capital building.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Revised<\/strong>: The<em> mob<\/em> stormed the Capital building.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Overuse of adverbs<\/strong>: She<em> carefully<\/em> and <em>quietly<\/em> walked through the room.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Revised<\/strong>: She <em>crept<\/em> through the room.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Remove redundant modifiers; overuse clutters the writing and distracts the reader.\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><strong>Overuse of modifiers<\/strong>: The business capitalists, who focus on domestic interests, only really invest in American groups.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Revised<\/strong>: The business capitalists rarely invest in international groups.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<h4>\u00a0For additional information on eliminating unnecessary words, see also:<\/h4>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><a href=\"https:\/\/writingcommons.org\/section\/editing\/\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener\">Edit for Economy<\/a><\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n&nbsp;","rendered":"<h4>Why should unnecessary words and phrases be eliminated?<\/h4>\n<p>Unnecessary words and phrases result in redundancy. A writer can achieve efficiency in writing by using concise words and phrases that denote clear meaning. Each word should contribute to the argument and purpose of an assignment; if a word or phrase can be removed from a sentence without affecting its meaning, it should be eliminated.<\/p>\n<h4>How can unnecessary words or phrases be eliminated?<\/h4>\n<ul>\n<li>Revise redundant phrases, synonymous terms, and unnecessary word pairs.<\/li>\n<li>\n<ul>\n<li>Quickly speeding (s<em>peeding<\/em> implies quickness)<\/li>\n<li>Young teenage mothers (<em>young<\/em> and <em>teenage<\/em> are synonyms)<\/li>\n<li>Financial cost (<em>financial<\/em> and <em>cost<\/em> both imply money)<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<ul>\n<li>Revise redundant terms in order to be more efficient.\n<ul>\n<li><strong>Redundant<\/strong>: Young adults should <em>self-assess<\/em> their situation before making a <em>big<\/em>, <em>life-changing\u00a0<\/em>decision.<\/li>\n<li><strong>Revised<\/strong>: Young adults should <em>assess<\/em> their situation before making a <em>major<\/em> decision.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<ul>\n<li>Remove redundant adjectives and adverbs; 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