{"id":30,"date":"2023-05-11T12:12:25","date_gmt":"2023-05-11T12:12:25","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-technicalwriting\/chapter\/instructions-2\/"},"modified":"2023-05-11T17:43:03","modified_gmt":"2023-05-11T17:43:03","slug":"instructions-2","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/suny-technicalwriting\/chapter\/instructions-2\/","title":{"raw":"Language and Tone Assessment","rendered":"Language and Tone Assessment"},"content":{"raw":"<div class=\"textbox shaded\">\r\n\r\nLinks will not work in Edit mode. To access materials, either\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>click \"Preview Changes\" option on right side of page, and links will work on that page<\/li>\r\n \t<li>OR, highlight the link you want to access and click on the \"chain\" icon in the toolbar. Copy and paste the link in a new browser window.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/div>\r\nSee the following instructions for completing and submitting the quiz.\r\n\r\n1.\u00a0 Access the\u00a0quiz that is in the following file, Language and Tone Assessment.\r\n\r\n2. Copy the quiz on your hard drive or disk.\r\n\r\n3. Save your work on the file and upload the completed quiz to the appropriate assignment page.\r\n\r\n<strong>Grading Rationale:<\/strong>\r\n\r\nCompleted quiz\u00a0grade is based on\u00a0100%.\r\n\r\n<!-- end of content body -->\r\n\r\nDownload a <a href=\"http:\/\/l+writing\/Language+and+Tone+Assessment.docx\">Word version of the file.\u00a0<\/a>\r\n<h1>Language and Tone Assessment<\/h1>\r\n<strong style=\"font-size: 13px;\">I. Sexist Language, Biased Language, Excessive Wording, Double Talk, Negative \u00a0Language.<\/strong>\r\n\r\n<strong>Instructions: Identify each sentence as sexist language, biased language, excessive wording, double talk, or negative language, and revise the sentence to show appropriate language. <\/strong>\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>Please research and select a doctor to introduce the speaker. Make sure that he is familiar with the speaker\u2019s professional studies.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>We will interview the women from the secretarial division for the position of manager.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>A truck driver needs at least 8 hours of sleep after he has driven for 8 hours.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Please cast your vote for the next councilman as soon as possible.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Although both candidates\u2019 positions appeal to valid reasoning, we need to consider the fallacies in the candidates\u2019 reported research.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>We need to choose reconditioned machinery for the parts department. Please select machinery from area A, which has been reconditioned by our plant, and from Area B, which has been shipped to us by a company on the west coast.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The negotiating team will meet at 5:00 p.m., in the afternoon.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>It my belief and the belief of many of the workers that we will and should discontinue the quality line of sundry products.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>I have noticed that your staff has been late for work several times this month. Talk to them about company rules.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Do not hand in your timesheets late.<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n&nbsp;\r\n\r\n<strong>II. Active Voice and Passive Voice <\/strong>\r\n\r\n<strong>Instruction:<\/strong> Mark each sentence as active voice or passive voice. If the agent of the action is not the subject of the sentence, the sentence is passive. Change all passive voice sentences to the active voice. (Hint: There are 4 passive voice sentences.)\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>The bulletin was distributed at 5:00 p.m. yesterday.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The firefighters went door-to-door collecting for the children\u2019s relief fund.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Each year, assistance is provided by the tour groups in the area.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The cost for the new products will be determined by supply and demand.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The bill was passed unanimously by the senate.<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n&nbsp;\r\n\r\n<strong>III. Subjective and Biased Language<\/strong>\r\n\r\nAs a real estate agent, you recently received an inquiry for a potential home buyer asking for information on public high schools in the area. The client explained that the data would help him decide on where to buy property.\r\n\r\nAfter researching public documents, you collected the following data and wrote the following letter to the client.\r\n<table>\r\n<tbody>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td><strong>PS #1<\/strong><\/td>\r\n<td><strong>PS #2<\/strong><\/td>\r\n<td><strong>PS #3<\/strong><\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Location - Rural<\/td>\r\n<td>Location \u2013 Suburbs<\/td>\r\n<td>Location - City<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Number of Students -1500<\/td>\r\n<td>Number of Students - 3500<\/td>\r\n<td>Number of Students - 4000<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<tr>\r\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 20-1<\/td>\r\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 25-1<\/td>\r\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 30-1<\/td>\r\n<\/tr>\r\n<\/tbody>\r\n<\/table>\r\n&nbsp;\r\n\r\nDear Mrs. Fox:\r\n\r\nRegarding your request for information on the area public high schools, I have collected the following data. Public records show that that PS # 1 is located in the rural area of town. The school is approximately 30 miles from the closest shopping center and hospital. It is a small school, with a population of only 1500 students. However, its student\/teacher ratio of 15-1 makes the learning ideal.\r\n\r\nPublic records show that PS #2 is located in the affluent suburbs of town. A greater number of 3500 students attend PS #2. Its student\/teacher ratio of 25-1 still provides excellent instruction.\r\n\r\nPublic records show that PS #3 is located in the heart of the town\u2019s city. The 3000 students who attend the school live within walking distance from the school. Although the student-teacher ratio of 30-1 may seem as though classrooms are overcrowded, each teacher has an assistant.\r\n\r\nThank you for your interest.\r\n\r\nSincerely,\r\n\r\nSalvador Fuller\r\n\r\n<strong>Instructions: Identify subjective language and biased language. Rewrite the letter using objective language and eliminating biased language.<\/strong>","rendered":"<div class=\"textbox shaded\">\n<p>Links will not work in Edit mode. To access materials, either<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>click &#8220;Preview Changes&#8221; option on right side of page, and links will work on that page<\/li>\n<li>OR, highlight the link you want to access and click on the &#8220;chain&#8221; icon in the toolbar. Copy and paste the link in a new browser window.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<p>See the following instructions for completing and submitting the quiz.<\/p>\n<p>1.\u00a0 Access the\u00a0quiz that is in the following file, Language and Tone Assessment.<\/p>\n<p>2. Copy the quiz on your hard drive or disk.<\/p>\n<p>3. Save your work on the file and upload the completed quiz to the appropriate assignment page.<\/p>\n<p><strong>Grading Rationale:<\/strong><\/p>\n<p>Completed quiz\u00a0grade is based on\u00a0100%.<\/p>\n<p><!-- end of content body --><\/p>\n<p>Download a <a href=\"http:\/\/l+writing\/Language+and+Tone+Assessment.docx\">Word version of the file.\u00a0<\/a><\/p>\n<h1>Language and Tone Assessment<\/h1>\n<p><strong style=\"font-size: 13px;\">I. Sexist Language, Biased Language, Excessive Wording, Double Talk, Negative \u00a0Language.<\/strong><\/p>\n<p><strong>Instructions: Identify each sentence as sexist language, biased language, excessive wording, double talk, or negative language, and revise the sentence to show appropriate language. <\/strong><\/p>\n<ol>\n<li>Please research and select a doctor to introduce the speaker. Make sure that he is familiar with the speaker\u2019s professional studies.<\/li>\n<li>We will interview the women from the secretarial division for the position of manager.<\/li>\n<li>A truck driver needs at least 8 hours of sleep after he has driven for 8 hours.<\/li>\n<li>Please cast your vote for the next councilman as soon as possible.<\/li>\n<li>Although both candidates\u2019 positions appeal to valid reasoning, we need to consider the fallacies in the candidates\u2019 reported research.<\/li>\n<li>We need to choose reconditioned machinery for the parts department. Please select machinery from area A, which has been reconditioned by our plant, and from Area B, which has been shipped to us by a company on the west coast.<\/li>\n<li>The negotiating team will meet at 5:00 p.m., in the afternoon.<\/li>\n<li>It my belief and the belief of many of the workers that we will and should discontinue the quality line of sundry products.<\/li>\n<li>I have noticed that your staff has been late for work several times this month. Talk to them about company rules.<\/li>\n<li>Do not hand in your timesheets late.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/p>\n<p><strong>II. Active Voice and Passive Voice <\/strong><\/p>\n<p><strong>Instruction:<\/strong> Mark each sentence as active voice or passive voice. If the agent of the action is not the subject of the sentence, the sentence is passive. Change all passive voice sentences to the active voice. (Hint: There are 4 passive voice sentences.)<\/p>\n<ol>\n<li>The bulletin was distributed at 5:00 p.m. yesterday.<\/li>\n<li>The firefighters went door-to-door collecting for the children\u2019s relief fund.<\/li>\n<li>Each year, assistance is provided by the tour groups in the area.<\/li>\n<li>The cost for the new products will be determined by supply and demand.<\/li>\n<li>The bill was passed unanimously by the senate.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/p>\n<p><strong>III. Subjective and Biased Language<\/strong><\/p>\n<p>As a real estate agent, you recently received an inquiry for a potential home buyer asking for information on public high schools in the area. The client explained that the data would help him decide on where to buy property.<\/p>\n<p>After researching public documents, you collected the following data and wrote the following letter to the client.<\/p>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td><strong>PS #1<\/strong><\/td>\n<td><strong>PS #2<\/strong><\/td>\n<td><strong>PS #3<\/strong><\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Location &#8211; Rural<\/td>\n<td>Location \u2013 Suburbs<\/td>\n<td>Location &#8211; City<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Number of Students -1500<\/td>\n<td>Number of Students &#8211; 3500<\/td>\n<td>Number of Students &#8211; 4000<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 20-1<\/td>\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 25-1<\/td>\n<td>Student\/Teacher Ratio 30-1<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/p>\n<p>Dear Mrs. Fox:<\/p>\n<p>Regarding your request for information on the area public high schools, I have collected the following data. Public records show that that PS # 1 is located in the rural area of town. 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