{"id":98,"date":"2017-06-08T11:32:04","date_gmt":"2017-06-08T11:32:04","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=98"},"modified":"2017-06-18T18:02:39","modified_gmt":"2017-06-18T18:02:39","slug":"the-three-story-thesis","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/chapter\/the-three-story-thesis\/","title":{"raw":"The Three-Story Thesis","rendered":"The Three-Story Thesis"},"content":{"raw":"<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">You have no doubt been drilled on the need for a thesis statement and its proper location at the end of the introduction. And you also know that all of the key points of the paper should clearly support the central driving thesis. Indeed, the whole model of the five-paragraph theme hinges on a clearly stated and consistent thesis. However, some students are surprised\u2014and dismayed\u2014when some of their early college papers are criticized for not having a good thesis. Their professor might even claim that the paper doesn\u2019t have a thesis when, in the author\u2019s view it clearly does. So, what makes a good thesis in college? <\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>A good thesis is non-obvious<\/strong>. High school teachers needed to make sure that you and all your classmates mastered the basic form of the academic essay. Thus, they\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">were mostly concerned that you had a clear and consistent thesis, even if it was something obvious like \u201csustainability is important.\u201d A thesis statement like that has a wide-enough scope to incorporate several supporting points and concurring evidence, enabling the writer to demonstrate his or her mastery of the five-paragraph form. Good enough! When they can, high school teachers nudge students to develop arguments that are less obvious and more engaging. College instructors, though, fully expect you to produce something more developed.<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><strong>A good thesis is arguable<\/strong>. In everyday life, \u201carguable\u201d is often used as a synonym for \u201cdoubtful.\u201d For a thesis, though, \u201carguable\u201d means that it\u2019s worth arguing: it\u2019s something with which a reasonable person might disagree. This arguability criterion dovetails with the non-obvious one: it shows that the author has deeply explored a problem and arrived at an argument that legitimately needs 3, 5, 10, or 20 pages to explain and justify. In that way, a good thesis sets an ambitious agenda for a paper. A thesis like \u201csustainability is important\u201d isn\u2019t at all difficult to argue for, and the reader would have little intrinsic motivation to read the rest of the paper. However, an arguable thesis like \u201csustainability policies will inevitably fail if they do not incorporate social justice,\u201d brings up some healthy skepticism. Thus, the arguable thesis makes the reader want to keep reading.<\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><strong>A good thesis is well specified<\/strong>. Some student writers fear that they\u2019re giving away the game if they specify their thesis up front; they think that a purposefully vague thesis might be more intriguing to the reader. However, consider movie trailers: they always include the most exciting and poignant moments from the film to attract an audience. In academic papers, too, a well specified thesis indicates that the author has thought rigorously about an issue and done thorough research, which makes the reader want to keep reading. Don\u2019t just say that a particular policy is effective or fair; say what makes it is so. If you want to argue that a particular claim is dubious or incomplete, say why in your thesis.<\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>A good thesis includes implications<\/strong>. Suppose your assignment is to write a paper about some aspect of the history of linen production and trade, a topic that may seem exceedingly arcane. And suppose you have constructed a well supported and creative argument that linen was so widely traded in the ancient Mediterranean that it actually served as a kind of currency.[footnote]For more see Fabio Lopez-Lazaro \u201cLinen.\u201d <a href=\"http:\/\/corp.credoreference.com\/component\/booktracker\/edition\/9668.html\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener noreferrer\">In Encyclopedia of World Trade from Ancient Times to the Present<\/a>. Armonk: M.E. Sharpe, 2005. (http:\/\/corp.credoreference.com\/component\/booktracker\/edition\/9668.html) [\/footnote]<\/span><span class=\"s2\">\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">That\u2019s a strong, insightful, arguable, well specified thesis. But which of these thesis statements do you find more engaging?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Version A: <\/strong>Linen served as a form of currency in the ancient Mediterranean world, connecting rival empires through circuits of trade. <\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><strong><span class=\"s1\">Version B: <\/span><\/strong><span class=\"s1\">Linen served as a form of currency in the ancient Mediterranean world, connecting rival empires through circuits of trade. The economic role of linen raises important questions about how shifting environmental conditions can influence economic relationships and, by extension, political conflicts.<\/span><\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Putting your claims in their broader context makes them more interesting to your reader and more impressive to your professors who, after all, assign topics that they think have enduring significance. Finding that significance for yourself makes the most of both your paper and your learning. <\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">How do you produce a good, strong thesis? And how do you know when you\u2019ve gotten there? <\/span><span class=\"s2\">Many instructors and writers <\/span><span class=\"s1\">find useful a metaphor based on this passage by Oliver Wendell Holmes, Sr.[footnote]Oliver Wendell Holmes Sr., <em>The Poet at the Breakfast Table<\/em> (New York: Houghton &amp; Mifflin, 1892)[\/footnote]:<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">There are one-story intellects, two-story intellects, and three-story intellects with skylights. All fact collectors who have no aim beyond their facts are one-story men. Two-story men compare, reason, generalize using the labor of fact collectors as their own. Three-story men idealize, imagine, predict\u2014their best illumination comes from above the skylight. <\/span><\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><img class=\"alignleft size-medium wp-image-540\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/107\/2016\/06\/30200435\/10301225845_b7f14dfc8a_z-200x300.jpg\" alt=\"Looking up from below the corner of a Japanese temple, so that three levels of red eaves, capped by black gutters, are arranged in a strong vertical point\" width=\"200\" height=\"300\" \/>One-story theses state inarguable facts. Two-story theses bring in an arguable (interpretive or analytical) point. Three-story theses nest that point within its larger, compelling implications.[footnote]The metaphor is extraordinarily useful even though the passage is annoying. Beyond the sexist language of the time, it displays\u00a0condescension toward \u201cfact-collectors\u201d which reflects a general modernist tendency to elevate the abstract and denigrate the concrete. In reality, data-collection is a creative and demanding craft, arguably more important than theorizing.[\/footnote]<\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">The biggest benefit of the three-story metaphor is that it describes a process for building a thesis. To build the first story, you first have to get familiar with the complex, relevant facts surrounding the problem or question. You have to be able to describe the situation thoroughly and accurately. Then, with that first story built, you can layer on the second story by formulating the insightful, arguable point that animates the analysis. That\u2019s often the most effortful part: brainstorming, elaborating and comparing alternative ideas, finalizing your point. With that specified, you can frame up the third story by articulating why the point you make matters beyond its particular topic or case. <\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p3\"><b><\/b><span class=\"s1\">For example, imagine you have been assigned a paper about the impact of online learning in higher education. You would first construct an account of the origins and multiple forms of online learning and assess research findings about its use and effectiveness. If you\u2019ve done that well, you\u2019ll probably come up with a well considered opinion that wouldn\u2019t be obvious to readers who haven\u2019t looked at the issue in depth. Maybe you\u2019ll want to argue that online\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">learning is a threat to the academic community. Or perhaps you\u2019ll want to make the case that online learning opens up pathways to college degrees that traditional campus-based learning does not. In the course of developing your central, argumentative point, you\u2019ll come to recognize its larger context; in this example, you may claim that online learning can serve to better integrate higher education with the rest of society, as online learners bring their educational and career experiences together. <\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\r\n<h3>Example 1<\/h3>\r\n<p class=\"p3\"><span class=\"s1\">To outline this example: <\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Online learning is becoming more prevalent and takes many different forms. <\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: While most observers see it as a <i>transformation <\/i>of higher education, online learning is better thought of an <i>extension <\/i>of higher education in that it reaches learners who aren\u2019t disposed to participate in traditional campus-based education.\r\n<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Online learning appears to be a promising way to better integrate higher education with other institutions in society, as online learners integrate their educational experiences with the other realms of their life, promoting the freer flow of ideas between the academy and the rest of society.<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/div>\r\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\r\n<h3>Example 2<\/h3>\r\n<span class=\"s1\">Here\u2019s another example of a three-story thesis:[footnote]Drawn from Jennifer Haytock, <em>Edith Wharton and the Conversations of Literary Modernism<\/em> (New York: Palgrave-MacMillan, 2008).[\/footnote]<\/span><span class=\"s2\">\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">\r\n<i><\/i><\/span>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Edith Wharton did not consider herself a modernist writer, and she didn\u2019t write like her modernist contemporaries.\r\n<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: However, in her work we can see her grappling with both the questions and literary forms that fascinated modernist writers of her era. While not an avowed modernist, she did engage with modernist themes and questions.\r\n<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Thus, it is more revealing to think of modernism as a conversation rather than a category or practice.<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/div>\r\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\r\n<h3>Example 3<\/h3>\r\n<span class=\"s1\">Here\u2019s one more example:\r\n<\/span>\r\n<ul class=\"ul1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Scientists disagree about the likely impact in the U.S. of <\/span><span class=\"s3\">the light brown <\/span><span class=\"s3\">apple moth (LBAM)<\/span><span class=\"s1\">, an agricultural pest native to Australia.\r\n<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: Research findings to date suggest that the decision to spray pheromones over the skies of several southern Californian counties to combat the LBAM was poorly thought out.\r\n<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Together, the scientific ambiguities and the controversial response strengthen the claim that industrial-style approaches to pest management are inherently unsustainable.<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/div>\r\n<span class=\"s1\">A thesis statement that stops at the first story isn\u2019t usually considered a thesis. A two-story thesis is usually considered competent, though some two-story theses are more intriguing and ambitious than others. A thoughtfully crafted and well informed three-story thesis puts the author on a smooth path toward an excellent paper.\r\n<\/span>\r\n<h2>The Organizational Statement<\/h2>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sometimes, an organization statement will be used in conjunction with a\u00a0thesis. \u00a0An organizational statement is a map that tells readers what they\u00a0should expect to read in an\u00a0essay. \u00a0It introduces the two or three main pieces of evidence that the author\u00a0will use to support the essay's\u00a0position. While not required in a thesis, organizational statements can make for stronger thesis statements.<\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">An organizational statement\u00a0can take the form of a separate sentence or can be attached to a\u00a0thesis in a single sentence, as seen in the examples below. The organizational elements appear in bold text:\u00a0<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Movies produced in the mid-1950s used obsessive behavior to depict teenage romance as something dangerous that should be avoided. \u00a0Obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and harmful<\/strong>, both to the teenagers and to the people who loved them.<\/span><\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\">Since obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and dangerous<\/strong>, movies produced in the mid-1950s used it to depict teenage romance as something that should be avoided for the sake of young adults and the people who loved them.<\/p>\r\n<\/blockquote>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Notice how the second\u00a0version, above, strengthens the original thesis by appearing as part of the same sentence. \u00a0<\/span><\/p>\r\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evidence in the body of an essay should be presented in the same order in which it\u00a0appears in an organizational statement. In the\u00a0example above, it means the paper would have to discuss rebelliousness, an uncontrollable nature, and danger (as they relate to obsessive teenage romance in film) <i>in that order<\/i>.<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<h2 class=\"im_title im_editable im_block\">Ways to Revise Your Thesis<\/h2>\r\nYou can cut down on irrelevant aspects and revise your thesis by taking the following steps:\r\n<ol id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l01\" class=\"im_orderedlist im_editable im_block\">\r\n \t<li>Pinpoint and replace all nonspecific words, such as <em class=\"im_emphasis\">people<\/em>, <em class=\"im_emphasis\">everything<\/em>, <em class=\"im_emphasis\">society<\/em>, or <em class=\"im_emphasis\">life<\/em>, with more precise words in order to reduce any vagueness.<strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Young people have to work hard to succeed in life.<strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> Recent college graduates must have discipline and persistence in order to find and maintain a stable job in which they can use and be appreciated for their talents. The revised thesis makes a more specific statement about success and what it means to work hard. The original includes too broad a range of people and does not define exactly what success entails. By replacing those general words like <em class=\"im_emphasis\">people<\/em> and <em class=\"im_emphasis\">work hard<\/em>, the writer can better focus his or her research and gain more direction in his or her writing.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Clarify ideas that need explanation by asking yourself questions that narrow your thesis. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> The welfare system is a joke. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> The welfare system keeps a socioeconomic class from gaining employment by alluring members of that class with unearned income, instead of programs to improve their education and skill sets. <em class=\"im_emphasis\">A joke<\/em> means many things to many people. Readers bring all sorts of backgrounds and perspectives to the reading process and would need clarification for a word so vague. This expression may also be too informal for the selected audience. By asking questions, the writer can devise a more precise and appropriate explanation for <em class=\"im_emphasis\">joke<\/em>. The writer should ask himself or herself questions similar to the 5WH questions. (See Chapter 8 \"The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?\" for more information on the 5WH questions.) By incorporating the answers to these questions into a thesis statement, the writer more accurately defines his or her stance, which will better guide the writing of the essay.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Replace any <span class=\"im_margin_term\"><span class=\"im_glossterm\">linking verbs<\/span><\/span> with action verbs. Linking verbs are forms of the verb <em class=\"im_emphasis\">to be<\/em>, a verb that simply states that a situation exists. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Kansas City schoolteachers are not paid enough. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> The Kansas City legislature cannot afford to pay its educators, resulting in job cuts and resignations in a district that sorely needs highly qualified and dedicated teachers. The linking verb in this working thesis statement is the word <em class=\"im_emphasis\">are<\/em>. Linking verbs often make thesis statements weak because they do not express action. Rather, they connect words and phrases to the second half of the sentence. Readers might wonder, \u201cWhy are they not paid enough?\u201d But this statement does not compel them to ask many more questions. The writer should ask himself or herself questions in order to replace the linking verb with an action verb, thus forming a stronger thesis statement, one that takes a more definitive stance on the issue:\r\n<ul id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l02\" class=\"im_itemizedlist\">\r\n \t<li>Who is not paying the teachers enough?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>What is considered \u201cenough\u201d?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>What is the problem?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>What are the results<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Omit any general claims that are hard to support. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Today\u2019s teenage girls are too sexualized. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> Teenage girls who are captivated by the sexual images on MTV are conditioned to believe that a woman\u2019s worth depends on her sensuality, a feeling that harms their self-esteem and behavior. It is true that some young women in today\u2019s society are more sexualized than in the past, but that is not true for all girls. Many girls have strict parents, dress appropriately, and do not engage in sexual activity while in middle school and high school. The writer of this thesis should ask the following questions:\r\n<ul id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l03\" class=\"im_itemizedlist\">\r\n \t<li>Which teenage girls?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>What constitutes \u201ctoo\u201d sexualized?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Why are they behaving that way?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Where does this behavior show up?<\/li>\r\n \t<li>What are the repercussions?<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>","rendered":"<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">You have no doubt been drilled on the need for a thesis statement and its proper location at the end of the introduction. And you also know that all of the key points of the paper should clearly support the central driving thesis. Indeed, the whole model of the five-paragraph theme hinges on a clearly stated and consistent thesis. However, some students are surprised\u2014and dismayed\u2014when some of their early college papers are criticized for not having a good thesis. Their professor might even claim that the paper doesn\u2019t have a thesis when, in the author\u2019s view it clearly does. So, what makes a good thesis in college? <\/span><\/p>\n<ol>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>A good thesis is non-obvious<\/strong>. High school teachers needed to make sure that you and all your classmates mastered the basic form of the academic essay. Thus, they\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">were mostly concerned that you had a clear and consistent thesis, even if it was something obvious like \u201csustainability is important.\u201d A thesis statement like that has a wide-enough scope to incorporate several supporting points and concurring evidence, enabling the writer to demonstrate his or her mastery of the five-paragraph form. Good enough! When they can, high school teachers nudge students to develop arguments that are less obvious and more engaging. College instructors, though, fully expect you to produce something more developed.<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><strong>A good thesis is arguable<\/strong>. In everyday life, \u201carguable\u201d is often used as a synonym for \u201cdoubtful.\u201d For a thesis, though, \u201carguable\u201d means that it\u2019s worth arguing: it\u2019s something with which a reasonable person might disagree. This arguability criterion dovetails with the non-obvious one: it shows that the author has deeply explored a problem and arrived at an argument that legitimately needs 3, 5, 10, or 20 pages to explain and justify. In that way, a good thesis sets an ambitious agenda for a paper. A thesis like \u201csustainability is important\u201d isn\u2019t at all difficult to argue for, and the reader would have little intrinsic motivation to read the rest of the paper. However, an arguable thesis like \u201csustainability policies will inevitably fail if they do not incorporate social justice,\u201d brings up some healthy skepticism. Thus, the arguable thesis makes the reader want to keep reading.<\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><strong>A good thesis is well specified<\/strong>. Some student writers fear that they\u2019re giving away the game if they specify their thesis up front; they think that a purposefully vague thesis might be more intriguing to the reader. However, consider movie trailers: they always include the most exciting and poignant moments from the film to attract an audience. In academic papers, too, a well specified thesis indicates that the author has thought rigorously about an issue and done thorough research, which makes the reader want to keep reading. Don\u2019t just say that a particular policy is effective or fair; say what makes it is so. If you want to argue that a particular claim is dubious or incomplete, say why in your thesis.<\/li>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>A good thesis includes implications<\/strong>. Suppose your assignment is to write a paper about some aspect of the history of linen production and trade, a topic that may seem exceedingly arcane. And suppose you have constructed a well supported and creative argument that linen was so widely traded in the ancient Mediterranean that it actually served as a kind of currency.<a class=\"footnote\" title=\"For more see Fabio Lopez-Lazaro \u201cLinen.\u201d In Encyclopedia of World Trade from Ancient Times to the Present. Armonk: M.E. Sharpe, 2005. (http:\/\/corp.credoreference.com\/component\/booktracker\/edition\/9668.html)\" id=\"return-footnote-98-1\" href=\"#footnote-98-1\" aria-label=\"Footnote 1\"><sup class=\"footnote\">[1]<\/sup><\/a><\/span><span class=\"s2\">\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">That\u2019s a strong, insightful, arguable, well specified thesis. But which of these thesis statements do you find more engaging?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Version A: <\/strong>Linen served as a form of currency in the ancient Mediterranean world, connecting rival empires through circuits of trade. <\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><strong><span class=\"s1\">Version B: <\/span><\/strong><span class=\"s1\">Linen served as a form of currency in the ancient Mediterranean world, connecting rival empires through circuits of trade. The economic role of linen raises important questions about how shifting environmental conditions can influence economic relationships and, by extension, political conflicts.<\/span><\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Putting your claims in their broader context makes them more interesting to your reader and more impressive to your professors who, after all, assign topics that they think have enduring significance. Finding that significance for yourself makes the most of both your paper and your learning. <\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">How do you produce a good, strong thesis? And how do you know when you\u2019ve gotten there? <\/span><span class=\"s2\">Many instructors and writers <\/span><span class=\"s1\">find useful a metaphor based on this passage by Oliver Wendell Holmes, Sr.<a class=\"footnote\" title=\"Oliver Wendell Holmes Sr., The Poet at the Breakfast Table (New York: Houghton &amp; Mifflin, 1892)\" id=\"return-footnote-98-2\" href=\"#footnote-98-2\" aria-label=\"Footnote 2\"><sup class=\"footnote\">[2]<\/sup><\/a>:<\/span><\/p>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">There are one-story intellects, two-story intellects, and three-story intellects with skylights. All fact collectors who have no aim beyond their facts are one-story men. Two-story men compare, reason, generalize using the labor of fact collectors as their own. Three-story men idealize, imagine, predict\u2014their best illumination comes from above the skylight. <\/span><\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignleft size-medium wp-image-540\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/107\/2016\/06\/30200435\/10301225845_b7f14dfc8a_z-200x300.jpg\" alt=\"Looking up from below the corner of a Japanese temple, so that three levels of red eaves, capped by black gutters, are arranged in a strong vertical point\" width=\"200\" height=\"300\" \/>One-story theses state inarguable facts. Two-story theses bring in an arguable (interpretive or analytical) point. Three-story theses nest that point within its larger, compelling implications.<a class=\"footnote\" title=\"The metaphor is extraordinarily useful even though the passage is annoying. Beyond the sexist language of the time, it displays\u00a0condescension toward \u201cfact-collectors\u201d which reflects a general modernist tendency to elevate the abstract and denigrate the concrete. In reality, data-collection is a creative and demanding craft, arguably more important than theorizing.\" id=\"return-footnote-98-3\" href=\"#footnote-98-3\" aria-label=\"Footnote 3\"><sup class=\"footnote\">[3]<\/sup><\/a><\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">The biggest benefit of the three-story metaphor is that it describes a process for building a thesis. To build the first story, you first have to get familiar with the complex, relevant facts surrounding the problem or question. You have to be able to describe the situation thoroughly and accurately. Then, with that first story built, you can layer on the second story by formulating the insightful, arguable point that animates the analysis. That\u2019s often the most effortful part: brainstorming, elaborating and comparing alternative ideas, finalizing your point. With that specified, you can frame up the third story by articulating why the point you make matters beyond its particular topic or case. <\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p3\"><b><\/b><span class=\"s1\">For example, imagine you have been assigned a paper about the impact of online learning in higher education. You would first construct an account of the origins and multiple forms of online learning and assess research findings about its use and effectiveness. If you\u2019ve done that well, you\u2019ll probably come up with a well considered opinion that wouldn\u2019t be obvious to readers who haven\u2019t looked at the issue in depth. Maybe you\u2019ll want to argue that online\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\">learning is a threat to the academic community. Or perhaps you\u2019ll want to make the case that online learning opens up pathways to college degrees that traditional campus-based learning does not. In the course of developing your central, argumentative point, you\u2019ll come to recognize its larger context; in this example, you may claim that online learning can serve to better integrate higher education with the rest of society, as online learners bring their educational and career experiences together. <\/span><\/p>\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\n<h3>Example 1<\/h3>\n<p class=\"p3\"><span class=\"s1\">To outline this example: <\/span><\/p>\n<ul>\n<li class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Online learning is becoming more prevalent and takes many different forms. <\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: While most observers see it as a <i>transformation <\/i>of higher education, online learning is better thought of an <i>extension <\/i>of higher education in that it reaches learners who aren\u2019t disposed to participate in traditional campus-based education.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Online learning appears to be a promising way to better integrate higher education with other institutions in society, as online learners integrate their educational experiences with the other realms of their life, promoting the freer flow of ideas between the academy and the rest of society.<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\n<h3>Example 2<\/h3>\n<p><span class=\"s1\">Here\u2019s another example of a three-story thesis:<a class=\"footnote\" title=\"Drawn from Jennifer Haytock, Edith Wharton and the Conversations of Literary Modernism (New York: Palgrave-MacMillan, 2008).\" id=\"return-footnote-98-4\" href=\"#footnote-98-4\" aria-label=\"Footnote 4\"><sup class=\"footnote\">[4]<\/sup><\/a><\/span><span class=\"s2\">\u00a0<\/span><span class=\"s1\"><br \/>\n<i><\/i><\/span><\/p>\n<ul>\n<li><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Edith Wharton did not consider herself a modernist writer, and she didn\u2019t write like her modernist contemporaries.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: However, in her work we can see her grappling with both the questions and literary forms that fascinated modernist writers of her era. While not an avowed modernist, she did engage with modernist themes and questions.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Thus, it is more revealing to think of modernism as a conversation rather than a category or practice.<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\n<h3>Example 3<\/h3>\n<p><span class=\"s1\">Here\u2019s one more example:<br \/>\n<\/span><\/p>\n<ul class=\"ul1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>First story<\/strong>: Scientists disagree about the likely impact in the U.S. of <\/span><span class=\"s3\">the light brown <\/span><span class=\"s3\">apple moth (LBAM)<\/span><span class=\"s1\">, an agricultural pest native to Australia.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Second story<\/strong>: Research findings to date suggest that the decision to spray pheromones over the skies of several southern Californian counties to combat the LBAM was poorly thought out.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><i><\/i><span class=\"s1\"><strong>Third story<\/strong>: Together, the scientific ambiguities and the controversial response strengthen the claim that industrial-style approaches to pest management are inherently unsustainable.<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<p><span class=\"s1\">A thesis statement that stops at the first story isn\u2019t usually considered a thesis. A two-story thesis is usually considered competent, though some two-story theses are more intriguing and ambitious than others. A thoughtfully crafted and well informed three-story thesis puts the author on a smooth path toward an excellent paper.<br \/>\n<\/span><\/p>\n<h2>The Organizational Statement<\/h2>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Sometimes, an organization statement will be used in conjunction with a\u00a0thesis. \u00a0An organizational statement is a map that tells readers what they\u00a0should expect to read in an\u00a0essay. \u00a0It introduces the two or three main pieces of evidence that the author\u00a0will use to support the essay&#8217;s\u00a0position. While not required in a thesis, organizational statements can make for stronger thesis statements.<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">An organizational statement\u00a0can take the form of a separate sentence or can be attached to a\u00a0thesis in a single sentence, as seen in the examples below. The organizational elements appear in bold text:\u00a0<\/span><\/p>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Movies produced in the mid-1950s used obsessive behavior to depict teenage romance as something dangerous that should be avoided. \u00a0Obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and harmful<\/strong>, both to the teenagers and to the people who loved them.<\/span><\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\">Since obsessive behavior was viewed as <strong>rebellious, uncontrollable, and dangerous<\/strong>, movies produced in the mid-1950s used it to depict teenage romance as something that should be avoided for the sake of young adults and the people who loved them.<\/p>\n<\/blockquote>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Notice how the second\u00a0version, above, strengthens the original thesis by appearing as part of the same sentence. \u00a0<\/span><\/p>\n<p class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\">Evidence in the body of an essay should be presented in the same order in which it\u00a0appears in an organizational statement. In the\u00a0example above, it means the paper would have to discuss rebelliousness, an uncontrollable nature, and danger (as they relate to obsessive teenage romance in film) <i>in that order<\/i>.<\/span><\/p>\n<h2 class=\"im_title im_editable im_block\">Ways to Revise Your Thesis<\/h2>\n<p>You can cut down on irrelevant aspects and revise your thesis by taking the following steps:<\/p>\n<ol id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l01\" class=\"im_orderedlist im_editable im_block\">\n<li>Pinpoint and replace all nonspecific words, such as <em class=\"im_emphasis\">people<\/em>, <em class=\"im_emphasis\">everything<\/em>, <em class=\"im_emphasis\">society<\/em>, or <em class=\"im_emphasis\">life<\/em>, with more precise words in order to reduce any vagueness.<strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Young people have to work hard to succeed in life.<strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> Recent college graduates must have discipline and persistence in order to find and maintain a stable job in which they can use and be appreciated for their talents. The revised thesis makes a more specific statement about success and what it means to work hard. The original includes too broad a range of people and does not define exactly what success entails. By replacing those general words like <em class=\"im_emphasis\">people<\/em> and <em class=\"im_emphasis\">work hard<\/em>, the writer can better focus his or her research and gain more direction in his or her writing.<\/li>\n<li>Clarify ideas that need explanation by asking yourself questions that narrow your thesis. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> The welfare system is a joke. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> The welfare system keeps a socioeconomic class from gaining employment by alluring members of that class with unearned income, instead of programs to improve their education and skill sets. <em class=\"im_emphasis\">A joke<\/em> means many things to many people. Readers bring all sorts of backgrounds and perspectives to the reading process and would need clarification for a word so vague. This expression may also be too informal for the selected audience. By asking questions, the writer can devise a more precise and appropriate explanation for <em class=\"im_emphasis\">joke<\/em>. The writer should ask himself or herself questions similar to the 5WH questions. (See Chapter 8 &#8220;The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?&#8221; for more information on the 5WH questions.) By incorporating the answers to these questions into a thesis statement, the writer more accurately defines his or her stance, which will better guide the writing of the essay.<\/li>\n<li>Replace any <span class=\"im_margin_term\"><span class=\"im_glossterm\">linking verbs<\/span><\/span> with action verbs. Linking verbs are forms of the verb <em class=\"im_emphasis\">to be<\/em>, a verb that simply states that a situation exists. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Kansas City schoolteachers are not paid enough. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> The Kansas City legislature cannot afford to pay its educators, resulting in job cuts and resignations in a district that sorely needs highly qualified and dedicated teachers. The linking verb in this working thesis statement is the word <em class=\"im_emphasis\">are<\/em>. Linking verbs often make thesis statements weak because they do not express action. Rather, they connect words and phrases to the second half of the sentence. Readers might wonder, \u201cWhy are they not paid enough?\u201d But this statement does not compel them to ask many more questions. The writer should ask himself or herself questions in order to replace the linking verb with an action verb, thus forming a stronger thesis statement, one that takes a more definitive stance on the issue:\n<ul id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l02\" class=\"im_itemizedlist\">\n<li>Who is not paying the teachers enough?<\/li>\n<li>What is considered \u201cenough\u201d?<\/li>\n<li>What is the problem?<\/li>\n<li>What are the results<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<li>Omit any general claims that are hard to support. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Working thesis:<\/strong> Today\u2019s teenage girls are too sexualized. <strong class=\"im_emphasis im_bold\">Revised thesis:<\/strong> Teenage girls who are captivated by the sexual images on MTV are conditioned to believe that a woman\u2019s worth depends on her sensuality, a feeling that harms their self-esteem and behavior. It is true that some young women in today\u2019s society are more sexualized than in the past, but that is not true for all girls. Many girls have strict parents, dress appropriately, and do not engage in sexual activity while in middle school and high school. The writer of this thesis should ask the following questions:\n<ul id=\"fresh-ch09_s01_s02_s01_l03\" class=\"im_itemizedlist\">\n<li>Which teenage girls?<\/li>\n<li>What constitutes \u201ctoo\u201d sexualized?<\/li>\n<li>Why are they behaving that way?<\/li>\n<li>Where does this behavior show up?<\/li>\n<li>What are the repercussions?<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n\n\t\t\t <section class=\"citations-section\" role=\"contentinfo\">\n\t\t\t <h3>Candela Citations<\/h3>\n\t\t\t\t\t <div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <div id=\"citation-list-98\">\n\t\t\t\t\t\t\t <div class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>The three-story thesis: from the ground up. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Amy Guptill. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: The College at Brockport, SUNY. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"http:\/\/textbooks.opensuny.org\/writing-in-college-from-competence-to-excellence\/\">http:\/\/textbooks.opensuny.org\/writing-in-college-from-competence-to-excellence\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/about\/pdm\">Public Domain: No Known Copyright<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>Image of pagoda corner. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Takashi Hososhima. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/flic.kr\/p\/gGhtya\">https:\/\/flic.kr\/p\/gGhtya<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-SA: Attribution-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>Revision and Adaptation. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Lumen Learning. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-SA: Attribution-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>What are thesis and organizational statements?. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Angela Francis. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: CUNY Academic Commons. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/\">https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC-SA: Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>Successful Writing Section 9.1:  Developing a Strong, Clear Thesis Statement. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Anonymous. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"http:\/\/2012books.lardbucket.org\/books\/successful-writing\/s13-01-developing-a-strong-clear-thes.html\">http:\/\/2012books.lardbucket.org\/books\/successful-writing\/s13-01-developing-a-strong-clear-thes.html<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC-SA: Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t <\/section><hr class=\"before-footnotes clear\" \/><div class=\"footnotes\"><ol><li id=\"footnote-98-1\">For more see Fabio Lopez-Lazaro \u201cLinen.\u201d <a href=\"http:\/\/corp.credoreference.com\/component\/booktracker\/edition\/9668.html\" target=\"_blank\" rel=\"noopener noreferrer\">In Encyclopedia of World Trade from Ancient Times to the Present<\/a>. Armonk: M.E. Sharpe, 2005. (http:\/\/corp.credoreference.com\/component\/booktracker\/edition\/9668.html)  <a href=\"#return-footnote-98-1\" class=\"return-footnote\" aria-label=\"Return to footnote 1\">&crarr;<\/a><\/li><li id=\"footnote-98-2\">Oliver Wendell Holmes Sr., <em>The Poet at the Breakfast Table<\/em> (New York: Houghton &amp; Mifflin, 1892) <a href=\"#return-footnote-98-2\" class=\"return-footnote\" aria-label=\"Return to footnote 2\">&crarr;<\/a><\/li><li id=\"footnote-98-3\">The metaphor is extraordinarily useful even though the passage is annoying. Beyond the sexist language of the time, it displays\u00a0condescension toward \u201cfact-collectors\u201d which reflects a general modernist tendency to elevate the abstract and denigrate the concrete. In reality, data-collection is a creative and demanding craft, arguably more important than theorizing. <a href=\"#return-footnote-98-3\" class=\"return-footnote\" aria-label=\"Return to footnote 3\">&crarr;<\/a><\/li><li id=\"footnote-98-4\">Drawn from Jennifer Haytock, <em>Edith Wharton and the Conversations of Literary Modernism<\/em> (New York: Palgrave-MacMillan, 2008). <a href=\"#return-footnote-98-4\" class=\"return-footnote\" aria-label=\"Return to footnote 4\">&crarr;<\/a><\/li><\/ol><\/div>","protected":false},"author":150,"menu_order":6,"template":"","meta":{"_candela_citation":"[{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"The three-story thesis: from the ground up\",\"author\":\"Amy Guptill\",\"organization\":\"The College at Brockport, SUNY\",\"url\":\"http:\/\/textbooks.opensuny.org\/writing-in-college-from-competence-to-excellence\/\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"pd\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"Image of pagoda corner\",\"author\":\"Takashi Hososhima\",\"organization\":\"\",\"url\":\"https:\/\/flic.kr\/p\/gGhtya\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"Revision and Adaptation\",\"author\":\"\",\"organization\":\"Lumen Learning\",\"url\":\"\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"What are thesis and organizational statements?\",\"author\":\"Angela Francis\",\"organization\":\"CUNY Academic Commons\",\"url\":\"https:\/\/bacwritingfellows.commons.gc.cuny.edu\/for-students\/what-are-thesis-and-organizational-statements\/\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-nc-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"Successful Writing Section 9.1:  Developing a Strong, Clear Thesis Statement\",\"author\":\"Anonymous\",\"organization\":\"\",\"url\":\"http:\/\/2012books.lardbucket.org\/books\/successful-writing\/s13-01-developing-a-strong-clear-thes.html\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-nc-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"}]","CANDELA_OUTCOMES_GUID":"","pb_show_title":"on","pb_short_title":"","pb_subtitle":"","pb_authors":[],"pb_section_license":""},"chapter-type":[],"contributor":[],"license":[],"class_list":["post-98","chapter","type-chapter","status-publish","hentry"],"part":93,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/98","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/chapter"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/150"}],"version-history":[{"count":4,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/98\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":294,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/98\/revisions\/294"}],"part":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/parts\/93"}],"metadata":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/98\/metadata\/"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=98"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"chapter-type","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapter-type?post=98"},{"taxonomy":"contributor","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/contributor?post=98"},{"taxonomy":"license","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/sunycorning1010elec201718\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/license?post=98"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}