{"id":407,"date":"2016-03-31T17:58:50","date_gmt":"2016-03-31T17:58:50","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level1-english\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=407"},"modified":"2017-01-23T23:03:56","modified_gmt":"2017-01-23T23:03:56","slug":"outcome-revising","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level1-english-gen\/chapter\/outcome-revising\/","title":{"raw":"Outcome: Revising","rendered":"Outcome: Revising"},"content":{"raw":"<h2>Identify Revision Activities<img class=\"wp-image-2059 aligncenter\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/85\/2016\/06\/07181026\/Revise-1.png\" alt=\"Graphic titled Revise. Bullet list: re-see, align structure, align thesis. All is in an orange circle bordered by gray arrows.\" width=\"369\" height=\"350\" \/><\/h2>\r\nTaken literally, revision is re-vision -- literally re-seeing the paper in front of you.\r\n\r\nThe act of revision centers heavily around the practice of questioning your work. \u00a0As you read through this section, and consider your own habits when it comes to revision, consider this list of guiding questions from The Writing Center at UNC-Chapel Hill.\r\n<div class=\"textbox shaded\">\r\n<h2 class=\"p1\">Revision Checklist<\/h2>\r\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Subject, Audience, Purpose<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\r\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What\u2019s the most important thing I want to say about my subject?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Who am I writing this paper for? What would my reader want to know about the subject? What does my reader already know about it?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Why do I think the subject is worth writing about? Will my reader think the paper was worth reading?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What verb explains what I\u2019m trying to do in this paper (tell a story, compare X and Y, describe Z)?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Does my first paragraph answer questions 1-4? If not, why not?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Organization<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\r\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many specific points do I make about my subject? Did I overlap or repeat any points? Did I leave my points out or add some that aren\u2019t relevant to the main idea?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many paragraphs did I use to talk about each point?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Why did I talk about them in this order? Should the order be changed?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How did I get from one point to the next? What signposts did I give the reader?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Paragraphing (Ask these questions of every paragraph)<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\r\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What job is this paragraph supposed to do? How does it relate to the paragraph before and after it?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What\u2019s the topic idea? Will my reader have trouble finding it?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many sentences did it take to develop the topic idea? Can I substitute better examples, reasons, or details?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How well does the paragraph hold together? How many levels of generality does it have? Are the sentences different lengths and types? Do I need transitions? When I read the paragraph out loud, did it flow smoothly?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Sentences (Ask these questions of every sentence)<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\r\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Which sentences in my paper do I like the most? The least?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can my reader \u201csee\u201d what I\u2019m saying? What words could I substitute for people, things, this\/that, aspect, etc.?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Is this sentence \u201cfat\u201d?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can I combine this sentence with another one?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can I add adjectives and adverbs or find a more lively verb?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Things to Check Last<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\r\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Did I check spelling and punctuation? What kinds of grammar or punctuation problems did I have in my last paper?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How does my paper end? Did I keep the promises I made to my reader at the beginning of the paper?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">When I read the assignment again, did I miss anything?<\/span><\/li>\r\n \t<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What do I like best about this paper? What do I need to work on in the next paper?<\/span><\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n<p class=\"p3\" style=\"text-align: right;\"><span class=\"s1\">\u2014 from <i>A Rhetoric for Writing Teachers <\/i>by Erika Lindemann<\/span><\/p>\r\n\r\n<\/div>\r\n<h2 class=\"p3\" style=\"text-align: left;\">What You Will\u00a0Learn to Do<\/h2>\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>identify the process of seeking input on writing from others<\/li>\r\n \t<li>identify strategies for incorporating personal and external editorial comments<\/li>\r\n \t<li>identify methods for re-seeing a piece of writing<\/li>\r\n \t<li>identify higher order concerns for revision<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<h2>Contribute!<\/h2><div style=\"margin-bottom: 8px;\">Did you have an idea for improving this content? We\u2019d love your input.<\/div><a href=\"https:\/\/docs.google.com\/document\/d\/1n9fsnJ4auIhJlbbIYMHKbigi0D25G6HVO62-H-ULHBQ\" target=\"_blank\" style=\"font-size: 10pt; font-weight: 600; color: #077fab; text-decoration: none; border: 2px solid #077fab; border-radius: 7px; padding: 5px 25px; text-align: center; cursor: pointer; line-height: 1.5em;\">Improve this page<\/a><a style=\"margin-left: 16px;\" target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/docs.google.com\/document\/d\/1vy-T6DtTF-BbMfpVEI7VP_R7w2A4anzYZLXR8Pk4Fu4\">Learn More<\/a>","rendered":"<h2>Identify Revision Activities<img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"wp-image-2059 aligncenter\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/85\/2016\/06\/07181026\/Revise-1.png\" alt=\"Graphic titled Revise. Bullet list: re-see, align structure, align thesis. All is in an orange circle bordered by gray arrows.\" width=\"369\" height=\"350\" \/><\/h2>\n<p>Taken literally, revision is re-vision &#8212; literally re-seeing the paper in front of you.<\/p>\n<p>The act of revision centers heavily around the practice of questioning your work. \u00a0As you read through this section, and consider your own habits when it comes to revision, consider this list of guiding questions from The Writing Center at UNC-Chapel Hill.<\/p>\n<div class=\"textbox shaded\">\n<h2 class=\"p1\">Revision Checklist<\/h2>\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Subject, Audience, Purpose<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What\u2019s the most important thing I want to say about my subject?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Who am I writing this paper for? What would my reader want to know about the subject? What does my reader already know about it?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Why do I think the subject is worth writing about? Will my reader think the paper was worth reading?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What verb explains what I\u2019m trying to do in this paper (tell a story, compare X and Y, describe Z)?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Does my first paragraph answer questions 1-4? If not, why not?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Organization<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many specific points do I make about my subject? Did I overlap or repeat any points? Did I leave my points out or add some that aren\u2019t relevant to the main idea?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many paragraphs did I use to talk about each point?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Why did I talk about them in this order? Should the order be changed?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How did I get from one point to the next? What signposts did I give the reader?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Paragraphing (Ask these questions of every paragraph)<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What job is this paragraph supposed to do? How does it relate to the paragraph before and after it?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What\u2019s the topic idea? Will my reader have trouble finding it?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How many sentences did it take to develop the topic idea? Can I substitute better examples, reasons, or details?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How well does the paragraph hold together? How many levels of generality does it have? Are the sentences different lengths and types? Do I need transitions? When I read the paragraph out loud, did it flow smoothly?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Sentences (Ask these questions of every sentence)<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Which sentences in my paper do I like the most? The least?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can my reader \u201csee\u201d what I\u2019m saying? What words could I substitute for people, things, this\/that, aspect, etc.?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Is this sentence \u201cfat\u201d?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can I combine this sentence with another one?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Can I add adjectives and adverbs or find a more lively verb?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<h3 class=\"p1\"><span class=\"s1\"><b>Things to Check Last<\/b><\/span><\/h3>\n<ol class=\"ol1\">\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">Did I check spelling and punctuation? What kinds of grammar or punctuation problems did I have in my last paper?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">How does my paper end? Did I keep the promises I made to my reader at the beginning of the paper?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">When I read the assignment again, did I miss anything?<\/span><\/li>\n<li class=\"li2\"><span class=\"s1\">What do I like best about this paper? What do I need to work on in the next paper?<\/span><\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p class=\"p3\" style=\"text-align: right;\"><span class=\"s1\">\u2014 from <i>A Rhetoric for Writing Teachers <\/i>by Erika Lindemann<\/span><\/p>\n<\/div>\n<h2 class=\"p3\" style=\"text-align: left;\">What You Will\u00a0Learn to Do<\/h2>\n<ul>\n<li>identify the process of seeking input on writing from others<\/li>\n<li>identify strategies for incorporating personal and external editorial comments<\/li>\n<li>identify methods for re-seeing a piece of writing<\/li>\n<li>identify higher order concerns for revision<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<h2>Contribute!<\/h2>\n<div style=\"margin-bottom: 8px;\">Did you have an idea for improving this content? We\u2019d love your input.<\/div>\n<p><a href=\"https:\/\/docs.google.com\/document\/d\/1n9fsnJ4auIhJlbbIYMHKbigi0D25G6HVO62-H-ULHBQ\" target=\"_blank\" style=\"font-size: 10pt; font-weight: 600; color: #077fab; text-decoration: none; border: 2px solid #077fab; border-radius: 7px; padding: 5px 25px; text-align: center; cursor: pointer; line-height: 1.5em;\">Improve this page<\/a><a style=\"margin-left: 16px;\" target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/docs.google.com\/document\/d\/1vy-T6DtTF-BbMfpVEI7VP_R7w2A4anzYZLXR8Pk4Fu4\">Learn More<\/a><\/p>\n\n\t\t\t <section class=\"citations-section\" role=\"contentinfo\">\n\t\t\t <h3>Candela Citations<\/h3>\n\t\t\t\t\t <div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <div id=\"citation-list-407\">\n\t\t\t\t\t\t\t <div class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Original<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Outcome: Revising. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Lumen Learning. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by\/4.0\/\">CC BY: Attribution<\/a><\/em><\/li><li>Image of Revise. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Kim Louie for Lumen Learning. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by\/4.0\/\">CC BY: Attribution<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Revision Checklist. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: The Writing Center at UNC-Chapel Hill. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"http:\/\/writingcenter.unc.edu\/faculty-resources\/classroom-handouts\/revision-checklist\/\">http:\/\/writingcenter.unc.edu\/faculty-resources\/classroom-handouts\/revision-checklist\/<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-nc-nd\/4.0\/\">CC BY-NC-ND: 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