{"id":367,"date":"2016-05-19T21:13:41","date_gmt":"2016-05-19T21:13:41","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=367"},"modified":"2016-08-01T23:18:59","modified_gmt":"2016-08-01T23:18:59","slug":"try-it-voice","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/chapter\/try-it-voice\/","title":{"raw":"Try It: Voice","rendered":"Try It: Voice"},"content":{"raw":"As you read the following passage, identify which sentences use the passive voice well and which use the passive voice ineffectively. Revise any ineffective sentences. The sentences have been numbered to aid in your comments:\r\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><img class=\"alignright wp-image-1738\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/106\/2016\/08\/01230831\/Changdiaz.jpg\" alt=\"Changdiaz\" width=\"250\" height=\"333\" \/>(1) Franklin Ram\u00f3n Chang D\u00edaz\u00a0is a veteran of seven Space Shuttle missions, making him a shared\u00a0record holder for the highest number of\u00a0spaceflights. (2) Chang D\u00edaz was born in San Jos\u00e9, Costa Rica, on April 5, 1950, to Ram\u00f3n \u00c1ngel Chang Morales and\u00a0Mar\u00eda Eugenia D\u00edaz Romero. (3) He attended school in Costa Rica until 1967 when he moved to the United States to finish his high school education. (4) The University of Connecticut, where a Bachelor of Science in mechanical engineering was earned in 1973, and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, where a Doctor of Science in applied plasma physics was earned in 1977, were attended by Chang D\u00edaz.<\/p>\r\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(5) Chang D\u00edaz was selected as an astronaut candidate by NASA in 1980, and he first flew aboard Space Shuttle mission STS-61-C in 1986. (6) He went on six other\u00a0missions between\u00a01989 and 2002. (7) During his final mission, three spacewalks with Philippe Perrin as part of the construction of the International Space Station were performed by Chang\u00a0D\u00edaz. (8) He then worked as the\u00a0director of the Advanced Space Propulsion Laboratory at the Johnson Space Center from 1993 to 2005.<\/p>\r\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">\u00a0(9) Chang D\u00edaz retired from NASA in 2005\u00a0to\u00a0set up the Ad Astra Rocket Company, which became dedicated to the development of advanced plasma rocket propulsion technology. (10) Years of research and development have produced the VASIMR (Variable Specific Impulse Magnetoplasma Rocket), an electrical propulsion device for use in space. (11) With a flexible mode of operation, the rocket can achieve very high exhaust speeds, and it even has the theoretical capability to take a manned rocket to Mars in 39 days.<\/p>\r\n[practice-area rows=\"4\"][\/practice-area]\r\n[reveal-answer q=\"503491\"]Show Answer[\/reveal-answer]\r\n[hidden-answer a=\"503491\"]There are five passive sentences in this passage: sentences 2, 4, 5, 7, and 10. Let's look at each sentence individually.\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Sentence 2 is an effective use of the passive voice. We want to focus on Chang\u00a0D\u00edaz; using the passive places him as the subject of the sentence, creating this emphasis.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Sentence 4 not an effective use of the\u00a0passive voice. Putting this in passive makes the sentence\u00a0very complicated and difficult to understand. The active voice lends itself to a much more understandable sentence:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>He went on to attend the University of Connecticut, where he earned a Bachelor of Science in mechanical engineering in 1973, and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, where he earned a Doctor of Science in applied plasma physics in 1977.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Sentence 5\u00a0is an effective use of the passive voice. Once again, we want to focus on Chang D\u00edaz, so having him as the subject in a passive sentence is a great way to do that.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Sentence 7\u00a0not an effective use of the passive voice. We want to focus on Chang D\u00edaz, so he should be the subject of the sentence. In this case, that means\u00a0we should use the active voice:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>During his final mission, Chang D\u00edaz performed three spacewalks with Philippe Perrin as part of the construction of the International Space Station.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Sentence 10\u00a0is an effective use of the passive voice.\u00a0We want to focus on the research and development, not on the people who completed the research. Additionally, it\u00a0would be difficult to pin down exactly who completed all of the research and development, so\u00a0using the passive voice to omit the actor of the sentence is\u00a0helpful here.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n[\/hidden-answer]","rendered":"<p>As you read the following passage, identify which sentences use the passive voice well and which use the passive voice ineffectively. Revise any ineffective sentences. The sentences have been numbered to aid in your comments:<\/p>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\"><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignright wp-image-1738\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/106\/2016\/08\/01230831\/Changdiaz.jpg\" alt=\"Changdiaz\" width=\"250\" height=\"333\" \/>(1) Franklin Ram\u00f3n Chang D\u00edaz\u00a0is a veteran of seven Space Shuttle missions, making him a shared\u00a0record holder for the highest number of\u00a0spaceflights. (2) Chang D\u00edaz was born in San Jos\u00e9, Costa Rica, on April 5, 1950, to Ram\u00f3n \u00c1ngel Chang Morales and\u00a0Mar\u00eda Eugenia D\u00edaz Romero. (3) He attended school in Costa Rica until 1967 when he moved to the United States to finish his high school education. (4) The University of Connecticut, where a Bachelor of Science in mechanical engineering was earned in 1973, and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, where a Doctor of Science in applied plasma physics was earned in 1977, were attended by Chang D\u00edaz.<\/p>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(5) Chang D\u00edaz was selected as an astronaut candidate by NASA in 1980, and he first flew aboard Space Shuttle mission STS-61-C in 1986. (6) He went on six other\u00a0missions between\u00a01989 and 2002. (7) During his final mission, three spacewalks with Philippe Perrin as part of the construction of the International Space Station were performed by Chang\u00a0D\u00edaz. (8) He then worked as the\u00a0director of the Advanced Space Propulsion Laboratory at the Johnson Space Center from 1993 to 2005.<\/p>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">\u00a0(9) Chang D\u00edaz retired from NASA in 2005\u00a0to\u00a0set up the Ad Astra Rocket Company, which became dedicated to the development of advanced plasma rocket propulsion technology. (10) Years of research and development have produced the VASIMR (Variable Specific Impulse Magnetoplasma Rocket), an electrical propulsion device for use in space. (11) With a flexible mode of operation, the rocket can achieve very high exhaust speeds, and it even has the theoretical capability to take a manned rocket to Mars in 39 days.<\/p>\n<p><textarea aria-label=\"Your Answer\" rows=\"4\"><\/textarea><\/p>\n<div class=\"qa-wrapper\" style=\"display: block\"><span class=\"show-answer collapsed\" style=\"cursor: pointer\" data-target=\"q503491\">Show Answer<\/span><\/p>\n<div id=\"q503491\" class=\"hidden-answer\" style=\"display: none\">There are five passive sentences in this passage: sentences 2, 4, 5, 7, and 10. Let&#8217;s look at each sentence individually.<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Sentence 2 is an effective use of the passive voice. We want to focus on Chang\u00a0D\u00edaz; using the passive places him as the subject of the sentence, creating this emphasis.<\/li>\n<li>Sentence 4 not an effective use of the\u00a0passive voice. Putting this in passive makes the sentence\u00a0very complicated and difficult to understand. The active voice lends itself to a much more understandable sentence:\n<ul>\n<li>He went on to attend the University of Connecticut, where he earned a Bachelor of Science in mechanical engineering in 1973, and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, where he earned a Doctor of Science in applied plasma physics in 1977.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<li>Sentence 5\u00a0is an effective use of the passive voice. Once again, we want to focus on Chang D\u00edaz, so having him as the subject in a passive sentence is a great way to do that.<\/li>\n<li>Sentence 7\u00a0not an effective use of the passive voice. We want to focus on Chang D\u00edaz, so he should be the subject of the sentence. In this case, that means\u00a0we should use the active voice:\n<ul>\n<li>During his final mission, Chang D\u00edaz performed three spacewalks with Philippe Perrin as part of the construction of the International Space Station.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<li>Sentence 10\u00a0is an effective use of the passive voice.\u00a0We want to focus on the research and development, not on the people who completed the research. Additionally, it\u00a0would be difficult to pin down exactly who completed all of the research and development, so\u00a0using the passive voice to omit the actor of the sentence is\u00a0helpful here.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<\/div>\n\n\t\t\t <section class=\"citations-section\" role=\"contentinfo\">\n\t\t\t <h3>Candela Citations<\/h3>\n\t\t\t\t\t <div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <div id=\"citation-list-367\">\n\t\t\t\t\t\t\t <div class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Original<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Try It: Voice. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Lumen Learning. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by\/4.0\/\">CC BY: Attribution<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Modification of Franklin Chang Diaz (errors added). <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Wikipedia. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/en.wikipedia.org\/wiki\/Franklin_Chang_D%C3%ADaz\">https:\/\/en.wikipedia.org\/wiki\/Franklin_Chang_D%C3%ADaz<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by-sa\/4.0\/\">CC BY-SA: Attribution-ShareAlike<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">Public domain content<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>US Astronaut Franklin Ramon Chang-Diaz. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: NASA. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"http:\/\/spaceflight.nasa.gov\/gallery\/images\/shuttle\/sts-111\/html\/s97-06573.html\">http:\/\/spaceflight.nasa.gov\/gallery\/images\/shuttle\/sts-111\/html\/s97-06573.html<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/about\/pdm\">Public Domain: No Known Copyright<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t <\/section>","protected":false},"author":17,"menu_order":50,"template":"","meta":{"_candela_citation":"[{\"type\":\"original\",\"description\":\"Try It: Voice\",\"author\":\"\",\"organization\":\"Lumen Learning\",\"url\":\"\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"cc\",\"description\":\"Modification of Franklin Chang Diaz (errors added)\",\"author\":\"\",\"organization\":\"Wikipedia\",\"url\":\"https:\/\/en.wikipedia.org\/wiki\/Franklin_Chang_D%C3%ADaz\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"cc-by-sa\",\"license_terms\":\"\"},{\"type\":\"pd\",\"description\":\"US Astronaut Franklin Ramon Chang-Diaz\",\"author\":\"\",\"organization\":\"NASA\",\"url\":\"http:\/\/spaceflight.nasa.gov\/gallery\/images\/shuttle\/sts-111\/html\/s97-06573.html\",\"project\":\"\",\"license\":\"pd\",\"license_terms\":\"\"}]","CANDELA_OUTCOMES_GUID":"b81e3a1e-cd5c-460b-a1fe-c4d1cd5e18b5","pb_show_title":"on","pb_short_title":"","pb_subtitle":"","pb_authors":[],"pb_section_license":""},"chapter-type":[],"contributor":[],"license":[],"class_list":["post-367","chapter","type-chapter","status-publish","hentry"],"part":21,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/367","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/chapter"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/17"}],"version-history":[{"count":6,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/367\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":1740,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/367\/revisions\/1740"}],"part":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/parts\/21"}],"metadata":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapters\/367\/metadata\/"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=367"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"chapter-type","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/pressbooks\/v2\/chapter-type?post=367"},{"taxonomy":"contributor","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/contributor?post=367"},{"taxonomy":"license","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level2-english\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/license?post=367"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}