{"id":836,"date":"2016-07-15T23:03:46","date_gmt":"2016-07-15T23:03:46","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level3-english\/?post_type=chapter&#038;p=836"},"modified":"2020-01-09T20:33:20","modified_gmt":"2020-01-09T20:33:20","slug":"try-it-sentence-structure","status":"web-only","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/courses.lumenlearning.com\/waymaker-level3-english-gen\/chapter\/try-it-sentence-structure\/","title":{"raw":"Try It: Sentence Structure","rendered":"Try It: Sentence Structure"},"content":{"raw":"<h2>Academic Writing<\/h2>\r\nRead the following passage pulled from\u00a0a grant proposal\u00a0written by an undergraduate microbiology\u00a0student. Critique any\u00a0run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and nonparallel structures you find as you read the passage. The sentences have been numbered to aid you in your comments.\r\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(1)\u00a0Several antimicrobial proteins are produced in the body. (2) These proteins <img class=\"alignright size-medium wp-image-1615\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/107\/2016\/08\/08205422\/IL8_Solution_Structure.rsh_-300x250.png\" alt=\"Diagram of chemokine: two red spiral structures surrounded by blue tendrils. Arrows point from one spiral point to another across each structure\" width=\"300\" height=\"250\" \/>attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. (3) Chemokines are one type of these antimicrobial proteins.\u00a0(4) Chemokines have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body. (5) Some chemokines have been found to demonstrate antimicrobial properties; however,\u00a0this has not been studied thoroughly.<\/p>\r\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(6) These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response. (7) Not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response. (8) The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010),\u00a0our lab has also confirmed these findings. (9) Previous research has shown that the C terminal region of the chemokine CCL28 is largely responsible for the antimicrobial activity (Liu\u00a02010).\u00a0(10) However, it has not been shown what the C terminus region of the chemokine binds to.<\/p>\r\n[practice-area rows=\"4\"][\/practice-area]\r\n[reveal-answer q=\"379369\"]Show Answer[\/reveal-answer]\r\n[hidden-answer a=\"379369\"]\r\n\r\nSentences 1\u20134 are all very similar in length, which makes the\u00a0beginning of this passage feel choppy. You may want to combine a few sentences to create more variety. Here are a couple possible revisions:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>Several antimicrobial proteins,\u00a0which\u00a0are produced in the body, attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. Chemokines, one type of these antimicrobial proteins, have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The body produces several different antimicrobial proteins. These proteins attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. One type of these proteins, Chemokines, have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\nSentence 7 is a fragment. The easiest solution is to simply combine with sentence 6 by changing the period to a colon or a comma:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response:\u00a0not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response,\u00a0not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\nSentence 8 is a run-on sentence.\u00a0You should either separate them with a period or a semicolon:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li>The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010);\u00a0our lab has also confirmed these findings.<\/li>\r\n \t<li>The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010). Our lab has also confirmed these findings.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n[\/hidden-answer]\r\n<h2>Parallelism<\/h2>\r\nLook at these\u00a0two\u00a0popular\u00a0quotes. How do they employ parallelism?\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>With great power comes great responsibility.[footnote]The original of this quote is actually \"With great power there must also come\u2014great responsibility!\" (Lee, Stan, and Steve Ditko. <i>Amazing Fantasy #15. <\/i>10 Aug. 1962. Digital.)[\/footnote]<\/li>\r\n \t<li>Live. Laugh. Love.<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n[practice-area rows=\"4\"][\/practice-area]\r\n[reveal-answer q=\"922757\"]Show Answer[\/reveal-answer]\r\n[hidden-answer a=\"922757\"]\r\n<ol>\r\n \t<li>This quote uses the following structure: Preposition +\u00a0<em>great<\/em> noun + verb +\u00a0<em>great<\/em> noun. This parallel structure in conjunction with the\u00a0repetition of <em>great<\/em>\u00a0creates emphasis. Compare the original quote with these two variants that use different adjectives:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><strong>Compare:<\/strong> With great power comes a lot of\u00a0responsibility.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Compare:<\/strong> With great power comes immense\u00a0responsibility.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n \t<li>This quote is made up of three one-word command sentences. They all start with the letter\u00a0<em>l<\/em> as well, which creates further continuity. Compare the original quote with these non-parallel variants:\r\n<ul>\r\n \t<li><strong>Compare:\u00a0<\/strong>Living. Go laugh. Don't hate.<\/li>\r\n \t<li><strong>Compare:\u00a0<\/strong>Live. Giggle. Adore.<\/li>\r\n<\/ul>\r\n<\/li>\r\n<\/ol>\r\n[\/hidden-answer]\r\n<h2>Sources<\/h2>\r\n<p class=\"hanging-indent\">Liu, Bin, and Eric Wilson. \"The Antimicrobial Activity of CCL28 Is Dependent on C-terminal Positively-charged Amino Acids.\" <em>European Journal of Immunology<\/em> 40.1 (2010): 186\u201396. Print.<\/p>","rendered":"<h2>Academic Writing<\/h2>\n<p>Read the following passage pulled from\u00a0a grant proposal\u00a0written by an undergraduate microbiology\u00a0student. Critique any\u00a0run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and nonparallel structures you find as you read the passage. The sentences have been numbered to aid you in your comments.<\/p>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(1)\u00a0Several antimicrobial proteins are produced in the body. (2) These proteins <img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" class=\"alignright size-medium wp-image-1615\" src=\"https:\/\/s3-us-west-2.amazonaws.com\/courses-images\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/107\/2016\/08\/08205422\/IL8_Solution_Structure.rsh_-300x250.png\" alt=\"Diagram of chemokine: two red spiral structures surrounded by blue tendrils. Arrows point from one spiral point to another across each structure\" width=\"300\" height=\"250\" \/>attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. (3) Chemokines are one type of these antimicrobial proteins.\u00a0(4) Chemokines have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body. (5) Some chemokines have been found to demonstrate antimicrobial properties; however,\u00a0this has not been studied thoroughly.<\/p>\n<p style=\"padding-left: 30px;\">(6) These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response. (7) Not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response. (8) The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010),\u00a0our lab has also confirmed these findings. (9) Previous research has shown that the C terminal region of the chemokine CCL28 is largely responsible for the antimicrobial activity (Liu\u00a02010).\u00a0(10) However, it has not been shown what the C terminus region of the chemokine binds to.<\/p>\n<p><textarea aria-label=\"Your Answer\" rows=\"4\"><\/textarea><\/p>\n<div class=\"qa-wrapper\" style=\"display: block\"><span class=\"show-answer collapsed\" style=\"cursor: pointer\" data-target=\"q379369\">Show Answer<\/span><\/p>\n<div id=\"q379369\" class=\"hidden-answer\" style=\"display: none\">\n<p>Sentences 1\u20134 are all very similar in length, which makes the\u00a0beginning of this passage feel choppy. You may want to combine a few sentences to create more variety. Here are a couple possible revisions:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Several antimicrobial proteins,\u00a0which\u00a0are produced in the body, attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. Chemokines, one type of these antimicrobial proteins, have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body.<\/li>\n<li>The body produces several different antimicrobial proteins. These proteins attach to the cell walls of microbes and cause cell death through diverse mechanisms. One type of these proteins, Chemokines, have generally been shown to direct immune cells to sites of infection in a body.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>Sentence 7 is a fragment. The easiest solution is to simply combine with sentence 6 by changing the period to a colon or a comma:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response:\u00a0not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response.<\/li>\n<li>These antimicrobial chemokines may play an important role in innate immune response,\u00a0not just as chemoattractants but also as active participants in the immune response.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>Sentence 8 is a run-on sentence.\u00a0You should either separate them with a period or a semicolon:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010);\u00a0our lab has also confirmed these findings.<\/li>\n<li>The chemokine CCL28 has been shown to have antimicrobial properties (Liu\u00a02010). Our lab has also confirmed these findings.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/div>\n<\/div>\n<h2>Parallelism<\/h2>\n<p>Look at these\u00a0two\u00a0popular\u00a0quotes. How do they employ parallelism?<\/p>\n<ol>\n<li>With great power comes great responsibility.<a class=\"footnote\" title=\"The original of this quote is actually &quot;With great power there must also come\u2014great responsibility!&quot; (Lee, Stan, and Steve Ditko. Amazing Fantasy #15. 10 Aug. 1962. Digital.)\" id=\"return-footnote-836-1\" href=\"#footnote-836-1\" aria-label=\"Footnote 1\"><sup class=\"footnote\">[1]<\/sup><\/a><\/li>\n<li>Live. Laugh. Love.<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<p><textarea aria-label=\"Your Answer\" rows=\"4\"><\/textarea><\/p>\n<div class=\"qa-wrapper\" style=\"display: block\"><span class=\"show-answer collapsed\" style=\"cursor: pointer\" data-target=\"q922757\">Show Answer<\/span><\/p>\n<div id=\"q922757\" class=\"hidden-answer\" style=\"display: none\">\n<ol>\n<li>This quote uses the following structure: Preposition +\u00a0<em>great<\/em> noun + verb +\u00a0<em>great<\/em> noun. This parallel structure in conjunction with the\u00a0repetition of <em>great<\/em>\u00a0creates emphasis. Compare the original quote with these two variants that use different adjectives:\n<ul>\n<li><strong>Compare:<\/strong> With great power comes a lot of\u00a0responsibility.<\/li>\n<li><strong>Compare:<\/strong> With great power comes immense\u00a0responsibility.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<li>This quote is made up of three one-word command sentences. They all start with the letter\u00a0<em>l<\/em> as well, which creates further continuity. Compare the original quote with these non-parallel variants:\n<ul>\n<li><strong>Compare:\u00a0<\/strong>Living. Go laugh. Don&#8217;t hate.<\/li>\n<li><strong>Compare:\u00a0<\/strong>Live. Giggle. Adore.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n<\/div>\n<\/div>\n<h2>Sources<\/h2>\n<p class=\"hanging-indent\">Liu, Bin, and Eric Wilson. &#8220;The Antimicrobial Activity of CCL28 Is Dependent on C-terminal Positively-charged Amino Acids.&#8221; <em>European Journal of Immunology<\/em> 40.1 (2010): 186\u201396. Print.<\/p>\n\n\t\t\t <section class=\"citations-section\" role=\"contentinfo\">\n\t\t\t <h3>Candela Citations<\/h3>\n\t\t\t\t\t <div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <div id=\"citation-list-836\">\n\t\t\t\t\t\t\t <div class=\"licensing\"><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Original<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Try It: Sentence Structure. <strong>Provided by<\/strong>: Lumen Learning. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by\/4.0\/\">CC BY: Attribution<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">CC licensed content, Shared previously<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Modification of Understanding Chemokine binding and Bacterial Response (errors added). <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Brittany Kartchner. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/licenses\/by\/4.0\/\">CC BY: Attribution<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><div class=\"license-attribution-dropdown-subheading\">Public domain content<\/div><ul class=\"citation-list\"><li>Image of chemokines. <strong>Authored by<\/strong>: Ramin Herati. <strong>Located at<\/strong>: <a target=\"_blank\" href=\"https:\/\/commons.wikimedia.org\/wiki\/File:IL8_Solution_Structure.rsh.png\">https:\/\/commons.wikimedia.org\/wiki\/File:IL8_Solution_Structure.rsh.png<\/a>. <strong>License<\/strong>: <em><a target=\"_blank\" rel=\"license\" href=\"https:\/\/creativecommons.org\/about\/pdm\">Public Domain: No Known Copyright<\/a><\/em><\/li><\/ul><\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t\t\t <\/div>\n\t\t\t <\/section><hr class=\"before-footnotes clear\" \/><div class=\"footnotes\"><ol><li id=\"footnote-836-1\">The original of this quote is actually \"With great power there must also come\u2014great responsibility!\" (Lee, Stan, and Steve Ditko. <i>Amazing Fantasy #15. <\/i>10 Aug. 1962. 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