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Since paragraph structure essentially \u201cpunctuates\u201d an essay or other piece of writing, if your paragraphs do not make sense, or don\u2019t fit together in a way that makes sense, your reader will have a hard time following your message.\r\n\r\nThere\u2019s no right or wrong way to revise a paragraph for logic. The sections you just read about topic sentences, logical organization methods, and transitions provide a good roadmap, but there is no formula for fixing paragraphs.\r\n<div class=\"textbox examples\">\r\n<h3>View the hotspots<\/h3>\r\nTake a look at the paragraph below and click the hotspots to see our suggestions for revising it.\r\n<iframe src=\"https:\/\/h5p.org\/h5p\/embed\/133504\" width=\"688\" height=\"659\" frameborder=\"0\"><\/iframe>\r\n\r\n<\/div>\r\nSee if you can give a hypothetical student some revision advice. 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